Ashlyxx
Nov 10, 2011
Undergraduate / Joining the Tutoring Club-Personal Statement (Competition), Yale (A "Hideous" Jacket) [5]
Well-written, but I think you can add more details about how you find the Tutoring Club meaningful. Realize that you only use a short paragraph talking about the tutoring job, and most of the essay is about your GPA, your grade. What are you trying to say? One memorable tutoring experience that changes the way you judge grades and alters the way you get along with others? You should lay more emphasis on the " change " tutoring club brings to you. : )
Well-written, but I think you can add more details about how you find the Tutoring Club meaningful. Realize that you only use a short paragraph talking about the tutoring job, and most of the essay is about your GPA, your grade. What are you trying to say? One memorable tutoring experience that changes the way you judge grades and alters the way you get along with others? You should lay more emphasis on the " change " tutoring club brings to you. : )
