jtorres89
Aug 28, 2011
Undergraduate / "Moving from New York City, I had trouble" - Boston University Supplement [4]
Hi Kris,
I'd be delighted to offer my advice on your essay. Overall the essay is good, I didn't notice much but a few minor grammatical changes.
1. Not only was I impressed by the university's beautiful buildings and classrooms. (You can also shorten this by just saying architecture. It sound better in my opinion.
2. whom is currently attending Boston University, grantedme the privilege of a personal tour of the campus, as well as the opportunity to view a cultivation of her old freshman coursework. I immediately....
3. Being a minority, I felt as if
If you could do me a favor and perhaps post a reply to my essay I would greatly appreciate it. Good luck with BU and thanks.
Hi Kris,
I'd be delighted to offer my advice on your essay. Overall the essay is good, I didn't notice much but a few minor grammatical changes.
1. Not only was I impressed by the university's beautiful buildings and classrooms. (You can also shorten this by just saying architecture. It sound better in my opinion.
2. whom is currently attending Boston University, grantedme the privilege of a personal tour of the campus, as well as the opportunity to view a cultivation of her old freshman coursework. I immediately....
3. Being a minority, I felt as if
If you could do me a favor and perhaps post a reply to my essay I would greatly appreciate it. Good luck with BU and thanks.