Undergraduate / "... and everybody was smiling" - UCF Admissions [5]

Up until this past summer my answer to the infamous "Where do you want to go to school?" question has been simply, "somewhere in Florida". In Florida alone, there are numerous respected colleges and within my past year of high school I have seen the majority of colleges I have been particularly interested in. My visits and tours have showed me lovely schools but the only one I have a real yearning for is UCF, it is the only place with a perfect balance of education and student life that seems just right for me. During the tour, our "Admissions Ambassador" unveiled to us everything UCF has to offer. Not only would I be able to receive my basic college education, but I will get so much more. The beautiful campus, the modern classrooms, and the energetic high-technology classes allow for a phenomenal education. Aside from the academic portion, UCF has amazing student life. The talk of football games, Spirit Splash, and even just going to eat at one of the campus restaurants makes me want to be part of the UCF community even more. Between the clubs, sports, Student Union and beautiful dorms there is barely a need to leave campus. Everything a student could ever want, everything I could ever want, is presented right there on school grounds. One thing that really stood out was the energy of the students. They all seemed like UCF was where they wanted to be and everybody was smiling. We rarely turned a corner and didn't see at least one student in black in gold. Ever since my tour on that scorching hot July afternoon, I knew I wanted to be a Knight.

I feel like it may not be personal enough. Any suggestions or feedback? Any help is appreciated! Thanks!