Undergraduate / "ready to face life with determination" - a person who has influenced you [5]

this is a great essay. i dont think it sounds too preachy its what you are passionate about. its wonderful. could you help with mine? Thanks!

Essays / 'About me' essay? Need any ideas on how to start it. [3]

Perhaps you could start off by telling where you were born and how where you havelived has impacted you as a person. then transition into present day and tell what your acedemic strengths are and what extracurriculars you like to participate in.