Undergraduate / "it turned to be cancer" - Common App Essay [11]

Reading about how your father had to go through these different treatments for cancer I can tell you from first hand because I had to go through the same thing. First thing I did was put it in Gods hand and left it there. From that time on I knew inside my hearts of hearts everything was going to be alright. All I Thought about was not letting this disease CANCER take over my life cause and my eyes cancer did not have me I had control of this disease I was very determined to beat it. Now I help others who are going through this disease. By telling them how God is and control he has the last say of our life, he's also our healer, doctor, and surgeon and he has all of the power no matter what the doctors say. Now I been cancer free for over seven years thanks to the God I served, he is on time God and he's will always be here for us even when our friend may turned there backs on us. CALL ON HIM AND HE WILL ANSWER. HAVE A BLESS DAY. MYRTIS

Undergraduate / 'the Boy Scout Law' Common App (too wordy and cheesy introduction?) [3]

I think this topic is great what I have read so far about being a boy scout you have hit the nail on the head. Because your introduction is perfect explain how a boy scout should be you name all of the key points. Keep up the good work.