leahlisa
Sep 24, 2011
Graduate / Reestablishing "herstory": SOP for PhD in Women's and Gender History [3]
I'm very impressed with your English! I just refined some parts because they sounded too wordy. The impact of what you say can be lost when too many excess words are in your writing. Also a little rearranging so that your sentences flow better. Good luck!
led me tolater pursue a graduate training
I hope to developas into a Twentieth-century Cultural
I suggested that the ambiguities of the politics of race in colonial Tahiti, reflected by the construction of Tahiti as an ideal site of exoticism and of the "vahine" as an aesthetic canon in Western imagination, positively reinforced interracial liaisons.
I think you can break this sentence down into two separate ones, I got a little lost trying to figure out what was being said
University of Paris VIII, France, which runs the most prolific research center in this discipline in my native country.
University of Paris VIII, France, my native country, where the most prolific research center in this discipline is located.
My reflection was also particularly conditioned
Also, my reflection was particularly conditioned
its scope and the sources available unfortunately were too restrictive to cover a PhD thesis.
This paragraph feels very repetitive, a lot of sentences beginning with "I would like..." Perhaps use other ways to say that
"I wish to" "I desire to" etc.
Or instead of "I would particularly be curious" "It would be fascinating to gauge the.."
I am therefore hopeful that
Therefore, I am hopeful that
Since graduation I have continued my scholastic
Since I graduated OR Since my graduation
accomplished and well-rounded academic.
academic is a verb, you can say "well-rounded scholar"
I'm very impressed with your English! I just refined some parts because they sounded too wordy. The impact of what you say can be lost when too many excess words are in your writing. Also a little rearranging so that your sentences flow better. Good luck!
led me to
I hope to develop
I suggested that the ambiguities of the politics of race in colonial Tahiti, reflected by the construction of Tahiti as an ideal site of exoticism and of the "vahine" as an aesthetic canon in Western imagination, positively reinforced interracial liaisons.
I think you can break this sentence down into two separate ones, I got a little lost trying to figure out what was being said
University of Paris VIII, France, which runs the most prolific research center in this discipline in my native country.
University of Paris VIII, France, my native country, where the most prolific research center in this discipline is located.
My reflection was also particularly conditioned
Also, my reflection was particularly conditioned
its scope and the sources available unfortunately were too restrictive to cover a PhD thesis.
This paragraph feels very repetitive, a lot of sentences beginning with "I would like..." Perhaps use other ways to say that
"I wish to" "I desire to" etc.
Or instead of "I would particularly be curious" "It would be fascinating to gauge the.."
I am therefore hopeful that
Therefore, I am hopeful that
Since graduation I have continued my scholastic
Since I graduated OR Since my graduation
accomplished and well-rounded academic.
academic is a verb, you can say "well-rounded scholar"