Posts by Aabesh

Aabesh

Oct 16, 2011

Undergraduate / "Tennis; maybe I'll beat him for once" - Common App Extracurricular [8]

I really liked your essay; the revised one gets right to the point and still manages to keep it under 1000 characters; I think the only thing I could even vaguely critique is this line:

It pushed our minds to the limit by making us calculate every hit; matches were essentially fast games of chess.

Maybe reword it to make it sound like the sentence in the original one; the sentence about its similarity to chess and its "calculating" seemed to flow better.

But then again I'm not the best at revising essays and such; it really was good though, keep up the good work!

Aabesh

Oct 16, 2011

Undergraduate / 'Science Olympiad' - Common App Extracurricular Box - Short Answer [2]

This was the short-response box for an extracurricular and its impact on you; I went with Science Olympiad and what it meant to me.

Science Olympiad was the epitome of an "extraordinary"-curricular activity for me. An extracurricular activity is considered to be something that you take after school to pass time or use as a gateway to meet people with similar interests. Essentially, this is what Science Olympiad was for me at first. However, I didn't realize that Science Olympiad was much more than just an avenue for meeting people or passing time. There were countless moments of camaraderie, unity, and synergy that could not have been possible if I chose not to try out for Science Olympiad in 2007. Science Olympiad was the catalyst of realization for what "living in the moment" truly meant for me. Without it, I doubt I would have had the same optimistic philosophy of life that I have today, and needless to say, I would have missed out on a plethora of amazing memories.