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Nov 1, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I love throwing' - Stanford Supplement Roommate Question [6]

Do you have any space left to add? I really like how straightforward the essay is, i just feel like it could use one more connection from throwing to your personality as a whole. Also, i think the camp reference is a little bit out of place, it doesn't really tell your roommate (or admissions officer) anything more about you.

Please edit my essay if you get a chance!
mcubeaus   
Nov 1, 2011
Undergraduate / 'from baseball to the stock market' - Stanford Roommate [3]

Stanford Roommate Essay
"Help your roommate - and us - get to know you better"

Hey man! How's it going? Let me tell you a little bit about me. I'm the kid who doesn't really fit a high school stereotype, the kid stuck on the fence between two disparate labels. I'm equal parts incorrigible nerd and sports-crazed jock. ScienceDaily and ESPN.com compete on a daily basis for my free time, and I honestly could not tell you if I'd rather be trying a new formula derivation or playing touch football. A war between these two sides of my personality raged for much of my younger life. My family often jokes that I knew one thing when I was a little kid: sports. Even before I knew what the words meant, or even how to pronounce them, I was memorizing and spewing statistics all day. "Did you see Sammy Sosa last night? 6 Ribbies (RBI's)! 6!" My dad's favorite story goes that my uncle once asked him who the new Texas football coach was, and my dad totally blanked on the name. Little 3-year old me nonchalantly piped in from across the room, "Come on Dad, it's Mack Brown!" But once I started school, sports had some serious competition: good old mathematics. I love math. I really do. Math started taking some time away from sports and my vast statistics knowledge took a big hit when I started devoting brainpower to multiplication tables, squares, cubes, roots, you name it. And when I figured out the breadth of math's applications, especially in sports, free time started disappearing fast. My parents often find me downstairs late into the night writing predictive algorithms for everything from baseball to the stock market.

I have about 500 characters left and i'm stuck on how to finish it. Any suggestions/criticisms are welcome! Thanks yall!
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