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dsalcoda419   
Nov 27, 2011
Undergraduate / 'born in the Republic of Korea, moved to the USA' - UC prompt 1 [2]

Superman, when I was a child, was my hero; he was my world. His super strength, his ability to fly, and his x-ray vision amazed me; and his use of them to save the world was completely mind blowing. He had great dedication to the planet that was not his own and great persistency to ensure that nothing bad would ever happen to it. When I was little all I wanted was to grow up and become exactly like him; however, that is not possible for no one can fly, see through walls, or lift cars and buildings with ease, but I knew for sure that I would, at least, show great dedication to my work and never give up just like him.

I was born in the Republic of Korea and then moved to the USA at the age of four with my parents and siblings for my parents believed we would have better opportunities here than in Korea. My father worked as a furniture mover and restaurant cook and my mother soon joined the work force at a burger shop after my youngest brother was born, for we didn't have enough money to sustain our large family of 8 with just my father's salary. However, even though my mother worked too, we still didn't have enough money, but they still kept working because they were dedicated to the cause of making sure that their children lived better lives than they did.

After years of working under another as a cook my dad was finally able to live the American dream and open up his own shop, he named it the "Krusty Krabs Fish and Chips" after my brother's favorite show Spongebob Squarepants. The restaurant was small but we were happy that we finally had something we could call our own; however, soon after three years we lost the restaurant and had to file for bankruptcy. My parents were crushed because they wanted to show their children that hard work made a difference and that things were turning around.

Soon after, my dad went to Louisiana to learn how to make sushi because other work was hard to find during that time; he was gone for three long months and money grew really tight at home, but they made things work for our family by my mom taking on two jobs and my dad getting a job at Louisiana to send money back to us. When he returned he showed off his new skills with the knife and got a new and better paying job as a sushi chef and things seemed better for a while. When I reached the first year of high school my father even opened up his own restaurant again. This was a great opportunity for the family even though the restaurant was in Fairfield which was a 45 minute commute back and forth, seven days a week, we rejoiced. Each and every day my parents worked long and tiresome days, to let their children live good lives. We to this day still have the restaurant and are doing okay by our family's teamwork and determination.

As I have matured and grown up I realized Superman was just a comic book character and was just a silly dream, I followed, to keep me motivated but my parents were truly my heroes; they are my world. They showed me through their power of unending love that dedication and persistency can be used to attain anything in life and that average people can be superheroes and do extraordinary things; that my dreams once held of becoming like superman, as a child, isn't childish.

My parents have taught me a lot by their actions; they have led me to work hard in everything that I do and to never quit no matter what situation; and I believe I have made them proud so far. I have dealt with tough obstacles like working, playing a sport, going to school, taking care of the house and watching over my brothers as a teen and I have not only managed to survive but I have excelled at finishing things effectively. My goal, however, is not only to make them proud by doing all this as they did, but to do even more extraordinarily fantastic things that would change the world; showing the world the love that they shared with me to help people that are distressed and in need, by becoming a leader in the business world.
dsalcoda419   
Nov 14, 2011
Undergraduate / UC prompt #2 my empathetic nature [4]

The subject is good but i also think you should give a specific example and it would be good if you do some proofreading; like instead of "small age" i think it is suppose to be "young age" and instead of "...other person's shoe" it might sound better if you put "another's shoes"; but other than that your essay has great potential
dsalcoda419   
Nov 13, 2011
Undergraduate / 'child in a Chinese family that is going to College' - The world you come from [3]

your essay has a very meaningful story but the problem is their is not terrible but bad grammar like in the very first sentence "my parents to the US for a better living"...paint a picture try to expand more on your theme...but other than that i think the plot is very touching...you could also instead of writing about all your days in general you could talk about one of the toughest days you had and how it mad you feel.
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