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Nov 14, 2011
Undergraduate / Christmas vacation- significant experience you have faced+ its impact on you (Depaul) [5]
Please write an essay (250 words minimum) Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
Hi everyone! Can you please read the essay and tell me any suggestions about what can I add or take out, and the grammar, too. I would really appreciate your feedback and your opinions.
One day, my life changed unexpectedly. What I thought was a Christmas vacation suddenly turned into a new life. All the
plans I had back in Mexico were gone. I had to start from the beginning with a new culture, new people, and most importantly a new language. It has been five and a half years since I started this new adventure. For the first four years I thought of myself in terms of my returning to a place what I truly called home. One day I woke up and realize that I couldn't hold on to my past and I needed to start my future here in this country. That day I knew I had to appreciate what my parents, with great effort, did for my siblings and me. I always try to challenge myself to prove that I can't always do better whether it is a better grade or run for a longer period of time. I want my family to be proud of their first member to go to college. I want to demonstrate to them that it was worth the sacrifices they had to make. This past years has been difficult, but thanks to the support of my family, I've kept a positive attitude in becoming a successful person. My main goal in life is to be a knowledgeable versatile Latin woman. I know that in order to achieve my goal I need to work hard, and I will not give up until I've accomplished it.
Please write an essay (250 words minimum) Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
Hi everyone! Can you please read the essay and tell me any suggestions about what can I add or take out, and the grammar, too. I would really appreciate your feedback and your opinions.
One day, my life changed unexpectedly. What I thought was a Christmas vacation suddenly turned into a new life. All the
plans I had back in Mexico were gone. I had to start from the beginning with a new culture, new people, and most importantly a new language. It has been five and a half years since I started this new adventure. For the first four years I thought of myself in terms of my returning to a place what I truly called home. One day I woke up and realize that I couldn't hold on to my past and I needed to start my future here in this country. That day I knew I had to appreciate what my parents, with great effort, did for my siblings and me. I always try to challenge myself to prove that I can't always do better whether it is a better grade or run for a longer period of time. I want my family to be proud of their first member to go to college. I want to demonstrate to them that it was worth the sacrifices they had to make. This past years has been difficult, but thanks to the support of my family, I've kept a positive attitude in becoming a successful person. My main goal in life is to be a knowledgeable versatile Latin woman. I know that in order to achieve my goal I need to work hard, and I will not give up until I've accomplished it.
