Posts by afroditi

afroditi

Nov 15, 2011

Undergraduate / has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations:I was born in a small city [5]

thank you so much, your comments and corrections were a great help! Good luck to you too!

afroditi

Nov 15, 2011

Undergraduate / 'follow my own senses and feelings' - Common App Topic of Choice [3]

I think that you should write a liitle bit more explaining how your attitude changed! You should explain further of who you are and what exactly those senses and feelings are. Ponder on this a little bit more.

afroditi

Nov 15, 2011

Writing Feedback / People can solve important problems by themselves [4]

I agree with breakingRenee. But I would also like to add that your essay needs some grammatical revision too.
If you are getting in trouble who you are like to ask for help? Asking Your parents or other family members to help you? Or you like you solve by yourself ? Or ask the government it should beIf you are in trouble who would you be proned to ask for help? Would you ask your parents or other family members for an advice or would you prefer to solve it on your own? Or would you ask the government?

afroditi

Nov 15, 2011

Undergraduate / has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations:I was born in a small city [5]

TOPIC: Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?

Well, I was born in a small city, named Karditsa, somewhere in the center of Greece. Most people earn their income from the agricultural sector as they own hectares of land outside the main city. (However, there are also many people that work in the service sector.). The annoying thing about Karditsa is that people there do not believe that much to themselves. Many of my classmates, the only dream they had, was to finish school, enter a technical school (IEK) or even the university and come back to Karditsa. And what's wrong with that, you would ask me. The problem is that, when you speak with people from this city, they seem isolated from the rest of the world, they only care about their own problems: if the weather is going to be rainy or not, if Maria married John and so on. It is a closed community where you know almost everyone, and almost everyone knows you and this ends up tiring. Most of the people there (even the young ones) do not interested about men being able to go to Mars. Some of them do not even care about global warming. I am saying neither that all people in Karditsa are indifferent nor that all people in large cities care about that stuff. What I am saying is that in a small city this phenomenon is more intense. It is the situation in Karditsa that motivated me to be the best at school, wanting always to learn more and more, giving always the best of me and persuading my parents to move to Athens, from where I could earn a better education and study abroad. I always wanted to go to America, where most of the progress in science and technology takes place, in order to get away from this isolation and indifference for the amazing things that happen around us, because they are not indifferent to me.

I would love somebody to help me!!! Be honest!! I know it needs revision!!