drtick
Nov 26, 2008
Undergraduate / 'study group' - aspiration for my life - UC Prompt #1#2 [4]
These are the essays I wrout for UC, please help me !!!!
Give me a comment about these essays please.
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Prompt #2 (all applicants)
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
When I was attending second semester of 11th grade, I was busy to help the pastor for the praise night what my church provides every year. "Why don't you be an actor for the play we have on this praise night?" the pastor suggested me to be an actor for the play in the praise night. It seemed it would be a great experience to me, so I accepted that suggestion.
My acting was not good, actually it was terrible. It was like a textbook reading whenever I say my lines and robot whenever I make a motion. Everything I make was awkward. After I experienced the strict and harsh practice, I realized thousand of people would watch my acting. That time, everything became so serious. I had accepted to act on the stage because it just looked fun and interesting. However, I had not realized that it also take a huge responsibility to act in front of people. Also, I realized my acting would affect on the image of the play. I could not be irresponsible about the play anymore. I made up my mind to be more serious about this play. First I said the lines over and over to fix my awkward accent and get the clear pronunciation and memorized it. Also, I practiced and thought the motions I would make at the stage. Whenever there was a practice with other people, I always participated to get the flow of acting. Sometimes I wanted to surrender. I had to spend most of the days by practicing. I had thought that why should I practice and concentrate on play this much although my part is smaller than other's have. To me, the practice was seemed as a process that is not that effective for my acting. I was not a professional actor; I had many other things to do for myself. However, I overcame these complaints with rumination of responsibility I have for the audience and thinking of myself with great joy after the play.
When the real play has come, I felt really nervous. When I was waiting for my turn to go out to the stage, I got really nervous. I memorized my lines over and over to calm myself and focused on my friend's acting to catch a flow of the play. When the music sounded, I stepped out to the stage and said my lines as same as how I practiced for a long time. Every thing was clear. The play ended in acclamations and cheers. After I came back to the backstage, I realized that I successfully acted at the stage and the play ended successfully. I felt great joy and happiness at that moment and made me to get proud of myself.
Through practice of the play I realized how being diligence is important to me. Even if I became diligent because of the pressure for responsibility, I realized how the diligence affects on one's skill and life style. Through steady practices and efforts, my acting skill had been improved dramatically. Also, after I finished the play, I got proud of my diligence and efforts I put on my acting. It was a great, effective experience on my life. If I did not decided to act, I would not realize how important to be a diligent. After I experienced this time, I became diligent on something I have to try.
These are the essays I wrout for UC, please help me !!!!
Give me a comment about these essays please.
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Prompt #2 (all applicants)
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
When I was attending second semester of 11th grade, I was busy to help the pastor for the praise night what my church provides every year. "Why don't you be an actor for the play we have on this praise night?" the pastor suggested me to be an actor for the play in the praise night. It seemed it would be a great experience to me, so I accepted that suggestion.
My acting was not good, actually it was terrible. It was like a textbook reading whenever I say my lines and robot whenever I make a motion. Everything I make was awkward. After I experienced the strict and harsh practice, I realized thousand of people would watch my acting. That time, everything became so serious. I had accepted to act on the stage because it just looked fun and interesting. However, I had not realized that it also take a huge responsibility to act in front of people. Also, I realized my acting would affect on the image of the play. I could not be irresponsible about the play anymore. I made up my mind to be more serious about this play. First I said the lines over and over to fix my awkward accent and get the clear pronunciation and memorized it. Also, I practiced and thought the motions I would make at the stage. Whenever there was a practice with other people, I always participated to get the flow of acting. Sometimes I wanted to surrender. I had to spend most of the days by practicing. I had thought that why should I practice and concentrate on play this much although my part is smaller than other's have. To me, the practice was seemed as a process that is not that effective for my acting. I was not a professional actor; I had many other things to do for myself. However, I overcame these complaints with rumination of responsibility I have for the audience and thinking of myself with great joy after the play.
When the real play has come, I felt really nervous. When I was waiting for my turn to go out to the stage, I got really nervous. I memorized my lines over and over to calm myself and focused on my friend's acting to catch a flow of the play. When the music sounded, I stepped out to the stage and said my lines as same as how I practiced for a long time. Every thing was clear. The play ended in acclamations and cheers. After I came back to the backstage, I realized that I successfully acted at the stage and the play ended successfully. I felt great joy and happiness at that moment and made me to get proud of myself.
Through practice of the play I realized how being diligence is important to me. Even if I became diligent because of the pressure for responsibility, I realized how the diligence affects on one's skill and life style. Through steady practices and efforts, my acting skill had been improved dramatically. Also, after I finished the play, I got proud of my diligence and efforts I put on my acting. It was a great, effective experience on my life. If I did not decided to act, I would not realize how important to be a diligent. After I experienced this time, I became diligent on something I have to try.
