nbdh21
Nov 30, 2011
Undergraduate / 'My Dad's Illness Gave Me Inspiration' - UC Prompt #1 [25]
Its good but remember show not tell
Its good but remember show not tell
nbdh21
Nov 30, 2011
Undergraduate / 'a very talkative and friendly person' - Dear Future Roommate [4]
Sounds good to me! I would love to have you as a roomate!
Sounds good to me! I would love to have you as a roomate!
nbdh21
Nov 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'helping people has always been my passion' - UC [8]
New Edited Version
Throughout high school I learned things like the quadratic formula, Newton's Laws and the spent countless hours memorizing French vocab. However, the most important thing I learned was through hard work and dedication anything is possible.
Academics have always been something I've had to work at. My first year of high school I found myself easily distracted and my grades suffered, but throughout high school, I learned to manage my time and put effort into my work. I began to work hard paying attention and taking notes during class, studying for test and attending afterschool tutoring. Eventually, my grades began to rise and this past cross country season, I earned the highest varsity GPA award as well as the scholar athlete award. Because of the troubles I've had learning how to balance my social and student life, I am positive I am prepared to excel academically.
Growing up, my parents encouraged me to use my many gifts to benefit others and be an active member of my community. Enrolling and excelling in many extra-curricular programs such as Teen Institute and my church youth group have given me many opportunities to improve my school as well as help the community. Throughout my life, I've been blessed with the opportunity to help at a variety of organizations such as City Mission, Angle Tree, and Samaritan's Purse. Recently, I enjoyed volunteering at the Haven of Rest making beds, cleaning windows, and mopping floors. Due to the opportunities given to me, and the lessons I have learned throughout my life, I am confident in saying that I am well-adapted and prepared to succeed and be involved in the University of Cincinnati community.
New Edited Version
Throughout high school I learned things like the quadratic formula, Newton's Laws and the spent countless hours memorizing French vocab. However, the most important thing I learned was through hard work and dedication anything is possible.
Academics have always been something I've had to work at. My first year of high school I found myself easily distracted and my grades suffered, but throughout high school, I learned to manage my time and put effort into my work. I began to work hard paying attention and taking notes during class, studying for test and attending afterschool tutoring. Eventually, my grades began to rise and this past cross country season, I earned the highest varsity GPA award as well as the scholar athlete award. Because of the troubles I've had learning how to balance my social and student life, I am positive I am prepared to excel academically.
Growing up, my parents encouraged me to use my many gifts to benefit others and be an active member of my community. Enrolling and excelling in many extra-curricular programs such as Teen Institute and my church youth group have given me many opportunities to improve my school as well as help the community. Throughout my life, I've been blessed with the opportunity to help at a variety of organizations such as City Mission, Angle Tree, and Samaritan's Purse. Recently, I enjoyed volunteering at the Haven of Rest making beds, cleaning windows, and mopping floors. Due to the opportunities given to me, and the lessons I have learned throughout my life, I am confident in saying that I am well-adapted and prepared to succeed and be involved in the University of Cincinnati community.
nbdh21
Nov 28, 2011
Undergraduate / 'helping people has always been my passion' - UC [8]
Please provide a Personal Statement regarding how your academic achievements, personal interests, and life experiences have helped prepare you to succeed academically and to be an active member of the UC community. Be sure your response addresses each of the three components. (Please limit your response to approximately 250 words).
Throughout high school I learned things like the quadratic formula, the parts of the human body, and the spent countless hours memorizing French vocab. However, the most important I learned was through hard work and dedication anything is possible.
Academics have always have always been something I've had to work at. My first year of high school I found myself easily distracted and my grades suffered, but Throughout high school, I've learned how manage my time and to study to achieve the grades I wanted. Through my hard work, I brought my grades up and this past cross country season, I received highest varsity GPA award as well as the scholar athlete award. Because of the troubles I've had learning how to balance my social and student life, im positive i am prepared to excel academically.
Beyond school, helping people has always been my passion. Growing up, my parents encouraged me to use my many gifts to benefit others and be an active member of my community. Enrolling, and excelling, in many extra-curricular programs such as Teen Institute and my church youth group have given me many opportunities to improve my school as well as help the community. Throughout my life, I've been blessed with the opportunity to help at a variety of organizations such as City Mission, Angle Tree, and my church run Bible School. Recently, I enjoyed volunteering at the Haven of Rest making beds, cleaning windows, and mopping floors. Due to the opportunities given to me, and the lessons I have learned throughout my life, I am confident in saying that I am well-adapted and prepared to succeed and be involved in the University of Cincinnati community.
*please provide constructive criticism. comments on strong points and weak points and what i can change to improve my essay will be greatly appreciated.
Please provide a Personal Statement regarding how your academic achievements, personal interests, and life experiences have helped prepare you to succeed academically and to be an active member of the UC community. Be sure your response addresses each of the three components. (Please limit your response to approximately 250 words).
Throughout high school I learned things like the quadratic formula, the parts of the human body, and the spent countless hours memorizing French vocab. However, the most important I learned was through hard work and dedication anything is possible.
Academics have always have always been something I've had to work at. My first year of high school I found myself easily distracted and my grades suffered, but Throughout high school, I've learned how manage my time and to study to achieve the grades I wanted. Through my hard work, I brought my grades up and this past cross country season, I received highest varsity GPA award as well as the scholar athlete award. Because of the troubles I've had learning how to balance my social and student life, im positive i am prepared to excel academically.
Beyond school, helping people has always been my passion. Growing up, my parents encouraged me to use my many gifts to benefit others and be an active member of my community. Enrolling, and excelling, in many extra-curricular programs such as Teen Institute and my church youth group have given me many opportunities to improve my school as well as help the community. Throughout my life, I've been blessed with the opportunity to help at a variety of organizations such as City Mission, Angle Tree, and my church run Bible School. Recently, I enjoyed volunteering at the Haven of Rest making beds, cleaning windows, and mopping floors. Due to the opportunities given to me, and the lessons I have learned throughout my life, I am confident in saying that I am well-adapted and prepared to succeed and be involved in the University of Cincinnati community.
*please provide constructive criticism. comments on strong points and weak points and what i can change to improve my essay will be greatly appreciated.
