juliarose15
Dec 13, 2011
juliarose15
Dec 12, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Art changed and inspired me' - common app short answers [3]
this is my short answer for my common app short answer. can any one give me feedback and suggestions for improvement please?
here it is (its is 951 characters):
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum):
When I was in the tenth grade I was chosen to become a student docent at the Museum of Fine Arts in Boston. In my first year I had to watch and learn from others. The older more experienced docents exuded a confidence and they knew almost everything there was to know about their art work and could answer any question asked of them. I was scared I would not be able to convey the same sureness and I wanted to pass on my passion for art in the best way that I could. Soon I became the trainer and a leader because of this program. I was passing on my experience and knowledge to the younger docents. They looked to me to learn and I was the example they would soon copy. The shyness and nervousness I had once felt had been lost and a new confident persona had taken over. Just knowing that I was looked up to along with the knowledge I has attained helped this new persona emerge. Art really had really changed and inspired me for the better.
this is my short answer for my common app short answer. can any one give me feedback and suggestions for improvement please?
here it is (its is 951 characters):
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum):
When I was in the tenth grade I was chosen to become a student docent at the Museum of Fine Arts in Boston. In my first year I had to watch and learn from others. The older more experienced docents exuded a confidence and they knew almost everything there was to know about their art work and could answer any question asked of them. I was scared I would not be able to convey the same sureness and I wanted to pass on my passion for art in the best way that I could. Soon I became the trainer and a leader because of this program. I was passing on my experience and knowledge to the younger docents. They looked to me to learn and I was the example they would soon copy. The shyness and nervousness I had once felt had been lost and a new confident persona had taken over. Just knowing that I was looked up to along with the knowledge I has attained helped this new persona emerge. Art really had really changed and inspired me for the better.
juliarose15
Dec 11, 2011
Undergraduate / Trouble with OSU essay about a multidimensional solution to a convoluted solution. [3]
I feel that this essay may be simpler than you think if i am reading it right.
what issues do you think are effecting society? maybe the debt crisis or the issue of global warming? (or anyone you feel passionately about)
it says develop a solution so i feel that you should do some research on the topic of your choice, but i also feel is entails some opinion as well.
convoluted means intricate and complex so really an social problem would work. take global warming, we don't yet have a solution or fully understand the cause but you could suggest a plan for society to take steps towards bettering the environment, like less uses of fossil fuels and the development of new, greener fuels.
sorry if i'm completely off but i feel this may be what they mean. goodluck!
I feel that this essay may be simpler than you think if i am reading it right.
what issues do you think are effecting society? maybe the debt crisis or the issue of global warming? (or anyone you feel passionately about)
it says develop a solution so i feel that you should do some research on the topic of your choice, but i also feel is entails some opinion as well.
convoluted means intricate and complex so really an social problem would work. take global warming, we don't yet have a solution or fully understand the cause but you could suggest a plan for society to take steps towards bettering the environment, like less uses of fossil fuels and the development of new, greener fuels.
sorry if i'm completely off but i feel this may be what they mean. goodluck!
