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Dec 13, 2011
Undergraduate / 'the essence of the university' - Unique qualities of Northwestern [4]

Hi, First I want to say good luck! I am also applying to Northwestern.

I think the essay is overall good, but its too long and wordy. And you may want to make it less like a list of qualities, but focus on two or three that really appeal to you.
lewisgf   
Dec 12, 2011
Undergraduate / 'sustainability and educating the next generation' - NYU supplement [3]

Hello, I am new to essay forum and this is my first post. I am an ESL student so there might be many grammer mistakes in my essays, and that's why I am here to ask for help! Here is my essay question:

Why NYU?
New York University certainly possess many appealing qualities, but what differentiates NYU and makes it especially fascinating to me is its passion for contributing to sustainability and educating the next generation to be green leaders. As an ambitious teen and the founder of *** Environmental Organization, I am devoting myself to change the world by influencing people with new and mind-opening view of sustainable development, and NYU can help me fulfill my dream. NYU, as such a large institution, make use of its influence to bring about positive changes in the environment on a global scale. The school has the remarkable opportunity to contribute to sustainability by reducing its own environmental impact, enlightening the students with sustainability education, and bringing the idea of sustainability far beyond the campus. The variousity and success of the campus projects on the environment are extraordinary. The Sustainability Task Force in NYU conducts environmental assessment and propose green plan to improve its footprint, which is part of ***'s subject. The Green Grants program provides students who have the same goal as me with the best opportunities.

People rely on the natural resources that the earth provides, but many of us do not consider the long-term consequences of our actions, and are unwilling to take the responsibility when facing environmental backlash. The world needs to be changed, and NYU is just the place that gathers people who have the same passion and same mission--to make a difference. NYU is one step ahead of other school in its realization of the importance of sustainability, and I want to join it and become one of the pionner of sustainable development.

p.s. *** represents the name of an environmental organization I founded, but I can't tell its name. I also talked about it in the main essay.

Thank you!
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