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Posts by AnnAMaY
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Dec 17, 2011
Undergraduate / We are so small but yet so powerful. Common App essay! [16]

Yes I was reffering to the 1st essay.

Even tough I think the intro is really unique , I think you need to get to the point about making advances in the world.

I suggest placing the line "we were created to make advances in this world" 1st as a line of own in the beginning. This way they wont they will get your idea immediately and read on to see how you arrived at it.
AnnAMaY   
Dec 17, 2011
Undergraduate / We are so small but yet so powerful. Common App essay! [16]

I think this is a very creative way to write your essay. However I think a lot of time is spent on your weaknesses. I understand taht you want to tell the story of how you were weak but now you're stronger, but I think if you emphasise on your strength a litle more it would be great !
AnnAMaY   
Dec 17, 2011
Undergraduate / 'medical equipment' - Why Duke Engineering? [3]

The prompt is "If you are applying to the Pratt School of Engineering, please discuss why you want to study engineering and why you would like to study at duke.

WHY ENGINEERING? WHY DUKE?
Excitement, anticipation, and the feeling of discovery and no I'm not referring to how Columbus felt when he discovered the New World. These are terms that come to mind when I think about engineering and more particularly Biomedical Engineering (BME). I have always had a passion for Science, but that was not what lead me to BME. It was actually my first trip in an ambulance when I contracted dengue that got me thinking along this line.

I had never thought of how medical equipment not only in the ambulance but in general were made or who designed them. Equipment such as ultrasounds, MRI's and x-rays that had saved the lives of so many people that I knew had become so common place as if they were always there. I began to think of all the advances in technology and was excited at the opportunities of discovery that could be possible by making use of these. After doing some more research into the field I was certain that BME was for me.

I believe that Duke is the ideal place for me to pursue my dream of becoming a biomedical engineer as it will allow me to explore the frontiers of engineering, delve into cutting edge research and collaborate with the best in the field of BME. The hands-on learning and the opportunity to do research particularly in the field of biomedical imaging is very exciting. I hope that I can combine my efforts with fellow engineers to further improve or develop new imaging techniques that can be useful to society and improve the accuracy of diagnosis.
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