shonah
Dec 23, 2011
Undergraduate / 'enjoyed puzzles and solving problems' - Stanford intellectual vitality [4]
First, you should write in the present tense (assuming everything still holds true today) : "As I have always enjoyed puzzles and solving problems, mathematics has always been my favorite subject."
I like how your essay shows what a big influence mathematics has on you and how much it has opened your eyes
You may want to base your points around a specific instance, like give a specific example of when math helped "shape the world" for you.
I also think that you should elaborate on how your experiences with math tie in to the bigger picture like you do in the last two sentences; explain more the connection between math and your "desire to learn".
First, you should write in the present tense (assuming everything still holds true today) : "As I have always enjoyed puzzles and solving problems, mathematics has always been my favorite subject."
I like how your essay shows what a big influence mathematics has on you and how much it has opened your eyes
You may want to base your points around a specific instance, like give a specific example of when math helped "shape the world" for you.
I also think that you should elaborate on how your experiences with math tie in to the bigger picture like you do in the last two sentences; explain more the connection between math and your "desire to learn".