Undergraduate / English as a barrier, a freshmen; "Never say you failed without trying" [5]

PlZ help me with my prompt #1. i am applying as a freshmen to UCs.
Any Help Is Appreciated, GREATLY!
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

"Never say you failed without trying" I mumbled to myself in front of the mirror. I was about to host a Karaoke contest in English at the high school I attended in Hong Kong. It was a challenge for me to speak in front of the whole school, using my second language - English. I felt excited but nervous at the same time because I did not consider myself capable of mastering this position.

My English teacher noticed my concern. "Practice makes perfect. Have faith to overcome anything in your life" Her encouragement urged me to do my best. I practiced the dialogues every day after school with my teacher, and at home. I scratched out and added lines, rephrased, and added tone to my speech, making it more than just reading off a paper. On the day of contest, my hardship was rewarded by the commendation from teachers and audience. I gave a speech to welcome the guests and students. Although I trembled when I stepped on stage, my voice was clear and loud, and the audience laughed in all the right places. Being a host in the singing contest not only initiated my interest in English, but also launched the power of communication into my world.

A great master once said that facing fear is the best way to overcome it. There are only 26 letters in English, but the language was never easy to me. After I moved to America, I entered my high school in California as an ELD student, and worked hard to master English. I encouraged myself with the experience I gained in Hong Kong, and my teacher's words remained strong in my mind. In time, my performances in class impressed my English teacher who recommended me to Honors. I took advantage of my skills in communication to help Chinese students who struggle. I helped parents and students translate when I worked as assistance in the counseling and parent support offices in school, I became more confident in communicating through English. This experience in overcoming English triggered me to become a translator to help people (Chinese?) with difficulties in speaking English.

My communication skills and experience as a translator gave me confidence and compelled me to organize educational activities in the Cantonese club. We arranged colleges tours for students to familiarize with colleges. As an officer, I used my bilingual skills to explained to students about college requirements and various majors. On colleges campuses, I spoke on behalf Chinese immigrants with undergraduate students and professors, and exchanged experiences. Beyond learning about colleges myself, I gained leadership experience and confidence in communicating in public. Additionally, the experience I gained in tours deepened my dream in becoming a translator to help other Chinese immigrants.

Unlike most students, I did not come to the United States for a high pay job. Instead, my curiosity in learning propelled me to continue my education and to achieve my dream. Ever since I began high school, I wondered which great master had created the alphabets that are used around the world like currencies. By becoming a translator, I will not only be able to help students, but also other families. Communications between people will serve as the core to unite people like currencies and the alphabets did.

any suggestion is greatly appreciated!