Undergraduate / 'My sister and I were born in Morocco' - Letter of special circumstances for college [15]

Very good essay. You have calm yet assertive tone and make your case well. Your anecdote, though, between the first and second paragraphs need to link together a little more, like how you stepped into a whole new world by leaving your home and mother. Just like a sentence or two on that. Then, everything else transitions well from that. It would sort of be a small bridge between two cliffs, if you get what I'm saying.

Some grammar mistakes, but nothing too significant. Good job, I think this is a very nice essay.