Undergraduate / 'troop of cheeky boys' - Descriptive writtng: Childrens birthday party [21]

This is really good! I never felt like I wanted to stop reading, and believe me it takes something pretty good to keep me interested. I love the details, I can really see it. You are a way better writer than I have ever been and I'm graduating this year.

Undergraduate / 'making and decorating a cake' - Common app short answer [6]

It's about extracurricular activities or work experiences (1000 character maximum). and I will Oko.

What about this?

Cake decorating is one of my passions. I always anticipate the taste of warm cake I cut off as I attempt to shape my unusual cake designs. When a birthday comes around I am the first to jump and volunteer to make the cake. I don't make average cakes, I always need a theme and from there, I brainstorm. I have made cakes for about four years now and I test my limits all the time. What really got me into cake decorating was my mother. She would always call me in when she needed tips or help with a problem, and I really enjoyed coming to the rescue. From basic cakes to 3D cakes there are always flaws and a way to fix them with a edible treat. Following my mother's footsteps, I decided I would start making them on my own. Soon I was making Spiderman, four wheelers, and even a standup snowmen cake. I love to be challenged and doing the intricate detail takes me to my own solitude where I can relax and release all my stress. I know I will be making cakes for a long time.