tchak
Jan 17, 2012
Graduate / (green energy / India / engineering skills / business community) YALE SOM [4]
Here's my take on your essays:
1) You go into your background for most of this essay and you mention at the very end what you wanted to do. You talk more about why you wanted to get an MBA (to understand the complexity of all these factors you point out - which is good bc Yale has a big focus on understanding complexity) but you don't really answer what is motivating you to achieve your short term goals. Your experience kind of gave you exposure, but what made you passionate about it? Are you even passionate about it?
3) It just seems to me that the "meat" of your essay (answering the question of what you think you'll get out of an MBA) seems so stereotypical and unoriginal. It doesn't show me that you have a good understanding of what the school really offers. What makes this school unique? Did you even research this? It's weird bc you mention that you had graduated from there (in F&ES), so you obviously have had some physical exposure to SOM, but your answer doesn't reflect any kind of understanding of what you'll get out of SOM specifically. It just seems like you pulled your generic answer from your other admissions essays to fit the question.
4) You've answered the question of "how have you connected with SOM in the past?" but that's not what the question is asking. How are you planning on engaging with your classmates at SOM? How are you planning on using the clubs and resources that are unique to SOM? You sort of go into how you'll use the networks within Yale (outside of SOM) but even then, you're not very explicit in how you will be using those resources once you're a student at SOM
Here's my take on your essays:
1) You go into your background for most of this essay and you mention at the very end what you wanted to do. You talk more about why you wanted to get an MBA (to understand the complexity of all these factors you point out - which is good bc Yale has a big focus on understanding complexity) but you don't really answer what is motivating you to achieve your short term goals. Your experience kind of gave you exposure, but what made you passionate about it? Are you even passionate about it?
3) It just seems to me that the "meat" of your essay (answering the question of what you think you'll get out of an MBA) seems so stereotypical and unoriginal. It doesn't show me that you have a good understanding of what the school really offers. What makes this school unique? Did you even research this? It's weird bc you mention that you had graduated from there (in F&ES), so you obviously have had some physical exposure to SOM, but your answer doesn't reflect any kind of understanding of what you'll get out of SOM specifically. It just seems like you pulled your generic answer from your other admissions essays to fit the question.
4) You've answered the question of "how have you connected with SOM in the past?" but that's not what the question is asking. How are you planning on engaging with your classmates at SOM? How are you planning on using the clubs and resources that are unique to SOM? You sort of go into how you'll use the networks within Yale (outside of SOM) but even then, you're not very explicit in how you will be using those resources once you're a student at SOM
