Theta526
Jan 17, 2012
Letters / 'knowledge like a light for people' - my motivational letter [2]
Hi! looking over your essay I think your kind of to broad. What I mean by that is in the first paragraph you start off listing your goals instead of telling what made them become your goals. Then in the second paragraph you started off by saying Now I want to .... I would not start off like that I would say something on the line of i'm interested or etc...Overall it's sounds good just need a little revision or probably have an english teacher look over it.
Hi! looking over your essay I think your kind of to broad. What I mean by that is in the first paragraph you start off listing your goals instead of telling what made them become your goals. Then in the second paragraph you started off by saying Now I want to .... I would not start off like that I would say something on the line of i'm interested or etc...Overall it's sounds good just need a little revision or probably have an english teacher look over it.