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Posts by Theta526
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Jan 17, 2012
Letters / 'knowledge like a light for people' - my motivational letter [2]

Hi! looking over your essay I think your kind of to broad. What I mean by that is in the first paragraph you start off listing your goals instead of telling what made them become your goals. Then in the second paragraph you started off by saying Now I want to .... I would not start off like that I would say something on the line of i'm interested or etc...Overall it's sounds good just need a little revision or probably have an english teacher look over it.
Theta526   
Jan 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'being close to my family' - science personal essay [3]

This is what I have so far... I want to make sure I start off strong and that's where i'm lacking at...

My passion for science came from when I was diagnosed with Scoliosis in the seventh grade. My personal experiences with being a patient and knowing firsthand the relationship and trust I built with my doctor, planted the desire I have in medicine. That desire intensified in high school when I set my educational goals by going to Western Michigan University (WMU) and study Pre- Nursing. My goals was derailed when my grandmother passed away my first semester in college. Even though I returned to WMU for another year I began to question my desire to go into the medical field.

Once my grandmother passed away I thought being close to my family would help put me on the right path as far as school. However, during my tenure at Marygrove College I changed my major from Biology to Psychology. I was having a hard time trying to balance academia, school activities and working. I was able to acknowledge that I was putting my school activities and work before my education. I got so far behind, that I thought there was no way to bring my grades up. Medicine has never been absent from my thoughts. As a psychology major, I'm still looking for a personal fulfillment. In that moment, my desire to become a Physician Assistant (PA) was amplified, and I decided to take course in psychology that I can use in the field of PA. Furthermore, I acquire great pleasure in people and their diversity, and by combining my love of science with the interpersonal rewards gained from interacting with them, I continue to strive to fulfill this ambition.
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