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Mar 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / I wish to purchase a business and not a house if I have enough money [3]

Topic: You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy. Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

My paragraph.
Someone asked me that If you had enough money to purchase something such as a house or a business, which one I would choose. It is interested and I never think that before. But I always hope that I will own a business. Therefore, purchasing a business maybe the best. Why?

Firstly, I will have my owned business, which's the happiest thing I can do. Everyone have to do anything I direct such as the way to design product, hire employees, or built factory... I will become a boss, and especially avoid pressure from others. And I can get a lot of experience about how to manage people, how to raise capital,or how to make a good relationship with staffs. They help me a lot to succeed in my life.

Secondly, A higher position. Do business means that I will be a businessman, and so everyone must be showed their respectability with me. They have to admire what I make and do. I will pay everyone's attention to my business, which 's attractive.

Finally, I can earn money by myself through buying business. I can sell my products, make a potential market or find a good partner to make profit. Then I spend a mount of money for travelling around the world with my family, or shopping, or built a large house.

Maybe a lot of people feel that I'm going far from fact, but these are all I expect to do.
laputa   
Mar 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS task2 ---influence of parents on children [4]

Almost children are influenced their parents about attitude, behavior, thought, etc. Some people said that the boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Personally I think it's true.

because you know gender can affect on level of your familiar, right! so it's easy to understand that the boys... because, the boys feel that they want to become a man like their father, and the girls do, too.mother can talk friendly to her daughter about some sensitive things and then her daughter can always keep in mind that forever, and father can teach his son about how to behave with girlfriend or how to win or compete...

so that's my opinion, hope can discuss this problem with people
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