Graduate / Motivational Essay for a Double degree program [5]

Hi,
I am an Italian student who want to apply for a Double Degree program. I just wrote an Essay but I don't know if i made some mistakes or other problem. Please let me know all problem in may Essay. Thank you:

Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Giuseppe Brandi and I want to apply for the Double Degree Program in XX. When I completed my Bachelor degree in Business Administration at the University of XX, with a thesis on Markowitz Portfolio Theory, I searched for a Postgraduate program in Finance which allows me to has an excellent education and the opportunity to study abroad. I found the MSc in Finance at the University of XX very interesting and with the beautiful opportunity to apply for the Double Degree Program. I checked the programs of the two related Faculty of the DD and I decided to enroll at the MSc in Finance with the hope to participate at the program to come to the Faculty of XX to complete my education.

My volition to come to XX is very strong, and this because I would be honored to study in an awarded Faculty of Economics like yours and pleasured to live in a beautiful city like XX. I want to point out my volition to come in XX saying that when I learned that there was the possibility to indicate more than one related Faculty for the DD, I didn't care about this because there was, and there is only XX in my mind. So, I indicated only the Faculty of XX for the project. I hope I have made the right choice. One of the many thing that made me wishful to apply for Yours University is the structure of the MSc in Money and Finance and the several, well diversified elective courses.

I am a lover of Game theory and Behavioral Finance and I saw that in Your MSc program there are more than one elective course in these fields. My hope is to write my Master thesis in one of these fields and to make further research in this framework to develop a new theory of behavioral and psychological science applied to financial and economic problem using mathematical methods. Another interest is the financial market and the computation of its fundamental tools.

An additional motivation to come in XX is that I want to live in a multicultural place where I can learn other cultures and open up my mind more. I think that I can be useful to the classroom, bringing my culture and my knowledge on financial and behavioral fields. I love to work hard and to be a leader in workgroup. I really like team projects and situation in which Is possible to learn from other knowledge and share mine to other. My most positive characteristic is that I am acute and really fast to understanding something that I don't know.

I really hope to be a part of your projects and your Faculty and to conclude my education with your Faculty name in my postgraduate degree.

I would like to thank you in advance for considering my application.