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tru

Mar 21, 2012

Undergraduate / "I am Vietnamese" - My UWC admission essay [16]

Thank you for you briliant idea!!
In addition, I have played guitar for 5 years and I'm a blue bell in karate. Currently, I'm the editor of my school's studying newspaper and have experience in holding evens and being a MC.

I think that social experiences and personal abilities can help, but how can I bring them into my essay and are they really needed in this case?

I am thinking of something like holding a music club ("heal the world" - like MJ has done with his music) or at least join a school band, what do you think?

tru

Mar 21, 2012

Undergraduate / "I am Vietnamese" - My UWC admission essay [16]

Thank you, Jenny :))

tru

Mar 20, 2012

Undergraduate / "I am Vietnamese" - My UWC admission essay [16]

I like your question very much, and maybe my answer will be like this :)

1. Vietnamese people are very friendly. To us everyone is a friend, regardless of who they are.
2. Vietnamese music: Here we have excellent pieces of folk music about every aspect of life: daily life, love, work, ect.
I think that you will like this song, just a old song in the north of our country but it was rearranged in a modern way:

mp3.zing.vn/bai-hat/Beo-Dat-May-Troi-Anh-Khang-ft-Quang-Thang/Z WZ9AIU6.html
3. Multiracial country: Viet Nam has 54 different races living all over the country, however, we are all living in peace and respect for each other.
4. Food: it would be a great mistake if I do not mention it here because Viet Nam's food are just GREAT!!!! I think no one can forget the extraordinary taste of them (just my personal opinion). Some examples may be: Pho (or exactly "phở" ), springroll, ect.

5. Beautiful sites: We have breathtaking site all around the country such as Ha Long Bay, the national Park of Cuc Phuong, Hoi An ancient town...

6. Vietnamese language: I am proud that I am Vietnamese and I am speaking Vietnamese - one of the most expressive languages in the world, we have a huge vocabulary and different uses of word to express all of our emotion in all level.

7. Marvelous history: Viet Nam has undergone many wars, invasions from other countries: China, Mongo, America and France. However we always won and get back peace to our country and people.

8. Rich in resources: Viet Nam have many types of natural resources such as oil, coal, metals... However we had never used these properly to develop our country as it should be.

9. Cultural diversity: as I have already mentioned above, we have 54 different races in one land, so we a lot of tradition that you may be interested in.

10. Finally, and this is the most important one, Viet Nam is the place where I was brought up, my family, my friends and every one that I love are here so I think I have no reason not to say that : I LOVE VIET NAM.

This time I'm applying for not only a scholarship but also a great chance of my life, so please help me. (though I know that my writing skills are really terrible :( )

My email address is truvd.95@gmail, please reply if you want to help me. Thank you!

tru

Mar 19, 2012

Undergraduate / "I am Vietnamese" - My UWC admission essay [16]

Advice:

Talk about your culture. Specific things you do, eat, say. Tell us how you will bring them to campus.
Who is your favorite ambassador? Why?
Were any relatives appointed to positions in the government?
Start the essay with the sentence I modified above.
I'll be happy to read another draft.

Thank you but I have to shoot down the reader with only 300 bullets, and I don't know how to express all of my ideas in such a short essay. Do you have any advice?

tru

Mar 19, 2012

Undergraduate / "I am Vietnamese" - My UWC admission essay [16]

Thank you for your advice, I will reply as soon as possible

tru

Mar 18, 2012

Undergraduate / "I am Vietnamese" - My UWC admission essay [16]

Hello,
I'm Currently working on my UWC admission essay and this is the fisrt time I've applied for a schorlarship so there ay be many mistakes. This is my essay:

Topic: Please write a statement of not more than 300 words explaining why you are interested in attending a United World College, describing both what you might contribute to the College and what you hope to gain.Since I was a little boy, I have always had a burning desire to do something great - being an ambassador. I want to go abroad, meet friends from all over the world and show them how beautiful my country is. And when I heard about UWC two years ago, I knew that my chance was coming.

To me, UWC is the place where my dream comes true. UWC has an excellent academic standard as well as a friendly multicultural environment. In UWC, I will not only be provided with important knowledge but also improve my social, teaming and leadership skills, which is essential for me to follow the way that I have chosen.

At UWC, I hope to be an active contributor to the school. As a student, I will take my education seriously while getting on well with other students regardless of countries, races or colors. As a Vietnamese, I will tell other students about my country, its heroic history and how lucky we are to live in such a peaceful world. I, together with my friends, will make UWC a big family for every student, a desirable place for anyone the first time they think of "going abroad".

After my wonderful years in UWC, I will become a knowledgeable young man who can help not only myself but also take part in developing my country. I want to become an ambassador of Viet Nam who can bring its images to the rest of the world, where it is still unknown. I want that one day, when anyone says that "I am Vietnamese", people will look up to them with a sign of admiration.

Like my grandfather has always told me, "Man becomes what he thinks about", just give me a chance and you will never regret about it.

Total: 300 words
Please help me!!!