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Posts by epamolarcoiii
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epamolarcoiii   
Apr 13, 2012
Essays / Role for teachers in the classroom and computers - about this topic? [5]

The thesis in understandable, few things that I suggest is ommit "devices" after computer so its simpler. I'm kind of thinking that health effects should be replaced by another reason, more on learning hindrance like the first two.

I hope this helps
epamolarcoiii   
Apr 13, 2012
Essays / "Although hospitals do keep track of their performance..." Argumentative Essay Thesis [3]

Hello EssayForum.com! I am pretty new around here and the forum looks pretty nice.
Anyway, here is my concern, is this a good thesis for an Argumentative Essay. I really have no idea if this is "defendable" enough:

"Although hospitals do keep track of their performance for everyone's sake, it's still hard to put trust on them because they are reported to contribute to the patient's death, and some hospital's staffs are more driven by their salary."
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