andrew_li
Apr 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / WHY SHOULD RECKLESS DRIVERS BE PUNISHED SEVERELY [2]
This is my first exposition.. Help me to improve my writing skill please.. Every single correction will highly appreciated
Some teenagers like speeding. Although they know that it is dangerous, they like speeding without thinking of the consequences; Therefore, reckless drivers should be punished severely. There are some reasons why reckless drivers should be punished severely.
Firstly, seeing speeding has caused many accidents, drivers should be more careful. Strengthen the law must be effective, so that drivers will be more careful.
Secondly, it is owing to driving recklessly might claim people's lives. It would not only take the victim's lives, but also affect the victim's relatives. Thus, reckless driver should be punished severely
It is clear that reckless drivers should be punished severely. We must do it to prevent more accidents. Beside it causes accidents, it would claim people's lives too
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This is my first exposition.. Help me to improve my writing skill please.. Every single correction will highly appreciated
Some teenagers like speeding. Although they know that it is dangerous, they like speeding without thinking of the consequences; Therefore, reckless drivers should be punished severely. There are some reasons why reckless drivers should be punished severely.
Firstly, seeing speeding has caused many accidents, drivers should be more careful. Strengthen the law must be effective, so that drivers will be more careful.
Secondly, it is owing to driving recklessly might claim people's lives. It would not only take the victim's lives, but also affect the victim's relatives. Thus, reckless driver should be punished severely
It is clear that reckless drivers should be punished severely. We must do it to prevent more accidents. Beside it causes accidents, it would claim people's lives too
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