Undergraduate / NYU short essays - "to join Gallotone Records" [11]

you're right, i don't think it applies too much to the latter bit of the prompt. If you can afford the space, go further into detail about what charities and whatnot.

Undergraduate / Short Answer Response, two stories. Which one to chose? [18]

I think that the 2nd story seems more interesting than the first

Undergraduate / A CULT and YOUTH?- UC Essay Prompt #1. revise. [7]

By dictionary definition, I am in a cult; ''Let your life speak.'

Do I have any errors? Does it sound right? Is it strong? If you can, please help me trim it down. Thanks![/b]

By dictionary definition, I am in a cult. Every Sunday, my family and I cleanse our souls of the murky karma accumulated from our past lives.

I was repeatedly taught that I did not pertain to any particular "religion" but to a "method" by which practitioners achieve enlightenment through meditation. We are bound by five precepts: Do not lie; do not steal; do not partake in adultery; do not partake in either drugs or alcohol; and do not eat meat or eggs.

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