ray2008
Jan 2, 2009
Writing Feedback / An essay about privacy and communication [4]
thank you so much but can you give another example
thank you so much but can you give another example
ray2008
Jan 1, 2009
Writing Feedback / An essay about privacy and communication [4]
Some people think that telephones and emails have made communication more personal and that they could share secrets and talk about personal things on them, but I disagree. If anything, they have made communication less personal. That is because privacy in these types of communication could be easily invaded.
Admittedly, it is difficult to talk about personal things on the phone because a third party may always hear you. For example, imagine you were talking to someone about some secrets that you both have, and there was another phone in the house, a third person could pick it up and overhear you talking. As a result, that third person might reveal your secrets to anyone that you do not want them to know. Following this further, when you know that your secrets have been revealed and you know who the third person was, some feuds will start between you and that person. Another example is that if someone talks on a mobile phone with a friend, this friend may record the call, which might have personal secrets, and expose it to other friends. Therefore, that may lead to a lack of trust between friends.
Emails could be more dangerous in terms of losing or invading privacy than phones. As an illustration, hackers can hack people's emails anytime they want and invade their privacy. What's more, those hackers could take and use any valuable information that people might have in their email and use them like credit card numbers. Another example is that when people use internet cafés to check their email, some may forget to sign out which leads to the possibility of using the information that they have in their email by the next user. As a result, this person, in the worst cases, could change the password of the previous user and pretend to be them.
In conclusion, telephones are a good way to communicate, but in terms of sharing personal things or secrets, they can be risky; not riskier than emails, though. Emails could be riskier because hackers may invade anyone's email any time and have a look at the valuable information people may have.
Some people think that telephones and emails have made communication more personal and that they could share secrets and talk about personal things on them, but I disagree. If anything, they have made communication less personal. That is because privacy in these types of communication could be easily invaded.
Admittedly, it is difficult to talk about personal things on the phone because a third party may always hear you. For example, imagine you were talking to someone about some secrets that you both have, and there was another phone in the house, a third person could pick it up and overhear you talking. As a result, that third person might reveal your secrets to anyone that you do not want them to know. Following this further, when you know that your secrets have been revealed and you know who the third person was, some feuds will start between you and that person. Another example is that if someone talks on a mobile phone with a friend, this friend may record the call, which might have personal secrets, and expose it to other friends. Therefore, that may lead to a lack of trust between friends.
Emails could be more dangerous in terms of losing or invading privacy than phones. As an illustration, hackers can hack people's emails anytime they want and invade their privacy. What's more, those hackers could take and use any valuable information that people might have in their email and use them like credit card numbers. Another example is that when people use internet cafés to check their email, some may forget to sign out which leads to the possibility of using the information that they have in their email by the next user. As a result, this person, in the worst cases, could change the password of the previous user and pretend to be them.
In conclusion, telephones are a good way to communicate, but in terms of sharing personal things or secrets, they can be risky; not riskier than emails, though. Emails could be riskier because hackers may invade anyone's email any time and have a look at the valuable information people may have.
ray2008
Dec 24, 2008
Undergraduate / things that we dont want to do and still do - essay feedback [3]
thank you so much
now can you please tell me what to do to improve my ideas, my style of writing cuz all of my assignments have the same lack of clarity. Im really tired of listening to my teacher saying ''ur essays suck'' and thank u again
thank you so much
now can you please tell me what to do to improve my ideas, my style of writing cuz all of my assignments have the same lack of clarity. Im really tired of listening to my teacher saying ''ur essays suck'' and thank u again
ray2008
Dec 23, 2008
Undergraduate / things that we dont want to do and still do - essay feedback [3]
can any body tell me what's wrong with this essay
Life sometimes pushes us to do things that we don't want to do. These things have to be dealt with. We could find these things in our professional lives and sometimes in our personal lives. I am absolutely convinced that we should deal and be flexible to do things that we don't want to do.
Sometimes, some of us don't enjoy our professional lives. For example, we get assignments that we really don't want to do, but we do them anyway. It is also difficult for us to work in jobs that we don't like or think they are boring, such as, working as a mail sorter or as a driver, but after a wise thinking we find that we have to continue for some reasons that we have. As a result, we should be realistic and know how to deal with those jobs. Also, we should learn how to like these jobs.
Similarly, our personal lives are full of things that we don't want to do. For instance, I really hate going to the doctor, but the necessity makes me go. Moreover, necessity makes some of us have surgeries. I think that no body wants to have a surgery, but if we have to do it, we will do, even though, we don't want to.
Finally, life doesn't always give us what we want, but with a little patience and some wise thinking we could easily deal with what life gives us. So, in the future, when we look back to our past, we don't regret taking the wrong decisions and start saying, "Had I done that thing, I would have been happier". In other words, our professional and personal lives do not always give us the satisfaction that we want because, simply, this is how life works.
can any body tell me what's wrong with this essay
Life sometimes pushes us to do things that we don't want to do. These things have to be dealt with. We could find these things in our professional lives and sometimes in our personal lives. I am absolutely convinced that we should deal and be flexible to do things that we don't want to do.
Sometimes, some of us don't enjoy our professional lives. For example, we get assignments that we really don't want to do, but we do them anyway. It is also difficult for us to work in jobs that we don't like or think they are boring, such as, working as a mail sorter or as a driver, but after a wise thinking we find that we have to continue for some reasons that we have. As a result, we should be realistic and know how to deal with those jobs. Also, we should learn how to like these jobs.
Similarly, our personal lives are full of things that we don't want to do. For instance, I really hate going to the doctor, but the necessity makes me go. Moreover, necessity makes some of us have surgeries. I think that no body wants to have a surgery, but if we have to do it, we will do, even though, we don't want to.
Finally, life doesn't always give us what we want, but with a little patience and some wise thinking we could easily deal with what life gives us. So, in the future, when we look back to our past, we don't regret taking the wrong decisions and start saying, "Had I done that thing, I would have been happier". In other words, our professional and personal lives do not always give us the satisfaction that we want because, simply, this is how life works.
