Scholarship / Walk with me in this journey I call life. (Scholarship) [3]

Ok, so what is your purpose in life actually?
Your essay is talk about your purpose I guess, but I can not find your purpose in the whole essay. In the essay, you talked about you before you have a purpose and the moment when you realized that you have a purpose in your life, and it makes you think positive, etc. But you forgot to mention what your purpose is, why, and how it inspires you. I think that should be the core of your essay.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 IELTS - Letter about defective kitchen product [4]

PBeltrao
Well, i think that your writting is realy good. However, in my opinion, you should focus more on tense. For example, if you tell about a story, you should use past tense rather than present simple tense.

+ When I turned on the machine, it emited a really strange sound, like a Formula One car passing by at 200 mph. After being washed, my dished looked dirtier than before and my silverware looked like it's made of brass instead of silver.