Undergraduate / THIS IS MY ESSAY FOR UIUC,I THINK IT REALLY NEED ENHANCEMENT [4]

Essay 1: In an essay of 300 words or less, write about how your personal or academic interests relate to your intellectual or professional goals.
Mathematics is one of my favorate academic,it's really interesting and helpful. Deduce and calculate can improve my logic capability, dialectical capablity and abstract capability, learning mathematics become a more rigorous thinker.

My professional goal is become a financier. My mother is a registered accountants and everyday she must faced mount of date and analyse these date in order make these date precisely. She often told me that if I want to be an excellent financier, preliminary is I must interested in mathematics and master it. Because only if I have a solid foundation, I can do my job well.

Francis Bacon ever said mathematics makes people thorough. An outstanding financier must be thorough, if a financier lack of this quality, he or she must be lost job. Mathematics is good training for the mind, so my interest in mathematics actually made me as a meticulous person.

A mount of economic data become the specific finacial data crux is to establish preferably mathematical models. This is how mathematics apply in finance. So, have a proficient mathematics skills is important to study in finance.

Finance is the heart of my academic and professional goal and my interest in math can actually help me to master finance. I believe that study in University of Illinois Urbana Champaign is my best choice to pursue my dream.

Undergraduate / MY ESSAY FOR SYRACUSE : IT'S REALLY NEED ENHACEMENT [4]

Growing up in Chinese education systeam, I actuallly think Chinese education is wrongly viewed as consisting mostly of theoretical, rather than practical instructions. However, the mission of scholarship in action imply that only in action, only in intense desire,can we grow as individuals.

Syracuse's mission of Scholarship in Action can make students who have higher education to beneficial society. As a freshman whose academic interest is in the field of finance, I'm eager to become a member of such a prosepctive mission and let my knowledge beneficial to my surroundings, including my country. After the financial crisis this year, many people lost jobs and companies faced bankrupted. Companies' superintend must have financial theories, but they can not avoid this crisis. Mainly because they can not use them in real world. After this financial crisis, I want to learn financial in my further study. I think Syracuse University is the best choice. Because your school can give me many opportunities to verified the theory with friends in group. Virtually, any issue in public affairs has a financial component. So I must do something good to society, such as help them how to deal with the financail crisis.

The mission of Scholarship in Action offered a great opportunity for me to apply my knowledge to the real-world engagement. Due to my limited ability as an individual, I would be more likely to work in large groups with my peers to implement such an engagement, and that's basically how I anticipate putting scholarship into actions.