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Nnorbu   
Oct 18, 2012
Undergraduate / Lennon' song told me to "imagine" peace and the prospect of "one" world, all I could feel was regret [3]

1) What work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature has surprised, unsettled, or challenged you, and in what way?

It all started in an automobile. The prospect of a 13-hour car ride ushered me to upload a vast collection of random music onto my IPod the previous night. While in the car, I set my IPod on shuffle and that is when I first heard the song.

UVA supplement - work of art that challenged, unsettled, surprised you? 2nd attempt

1) What work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature has surprised, unsettled, or challenged you, and in what way?

It was a song that I stumbled upon unintentionally. While perusing through my cousin sister's handbag, I found an almost archaic MP3 player with four songs on it. Curious, I grabbed headphones from my room and listened to each song. The fist three were boring and tasteless but the third one really captivated me.

The piano's soft, melancholic tune initiated the piece; it was a melody that was new to my ears. Suddenly, a paradoxically somber yet hopeful voice added its influence to the instrumentation. The song's beautiful melody served as a backdrop to its powerful message. It was a song that called for peace, compassion, and unity among the people. The song was John Lennon's "Imagine."

I thought about the utopian society John Lennon described in "Imagine," a place where people are compassionate, a place where there is no concept of war, a place everybody lives as one and immediately I thought to myself, "That's Bhutan!"

A nation considered a part of the third world, Bhutan is a small kingdom nestled in between two world giants, India and China. My nation's governing principle is based on Gross National Happiness, a policy that measures development through happiness. From the pristine green Himalayan mountains, the smiling faces of people chanting their communal prayers, the free health and medical care offered by the government, to the traditional style of architecture all over the land, Bhutan is a developed nation in accordance to GNH. It is the embodiment of the place described in "Imagine."

There was no need for me to "Imagine" a utopian society since I was living in one. The song surprised me because the future John Lennon Imagined was my home, Bhutan. Its message to me resulted in a pleasant epiphany; even though Bhutan is insignificant to the world it is a place the world should strive to imitate. If John Lennon was still alive, I would send him an invitation letter entitled, "You don't have to imagine anymore."
Nnorbu   
Oct 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Music: Friend, Or Enemy?' - Common app essay [3]

Very nice! I really like the concept of the "war."
One thing i would suggest is that you proofread and ask other to proofread as i cam across a few grammatical errors in the introduction.

Overall, a very nice essay though!
Cheers.
Nnorbu   
Oct 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'My dad makes me work hard, but also relax' - Common App [4]

It's a solid essay. A problem i noticed was the repetition of words like mandatory. Also, the tone of the essay was quite negative at times when you say that you "intensely disliked" your dad for making you study.

The only reservation i have is that your subject of influence (being your dad) is quite generic and i wonder how many other applicants would write similar essays.

Anyways, good luck.
Nnorbu   
Sep 27, 2012
Undergraduate / Elaborate on a time when something you witnessed caused you to reflect on your hritag [2]

Common App Essay

Topic of your choice: Elaborate on a time when something you witnessed caused you to reflect on your heritage.

Last summer, my parents invited their friends from Germany to visit Bhutan who stayed at my house for the better part of a week. I do not remember them much except for their son Jakub, who almost made me lose faith in my national identity. The day they arrived, I waited at the entrance of my home to personally welcome them. The first impression I had of them was not good. As they scaled the stairs of my garage, the first thing I witnessed was Jakub whining about being in "a pre-historic jungle."

Jakub's parents' faces were red with embarrassment at his remarks about the backwardness of Bhutan. I vaguely recall him referring to my home nation as being "primitive." The odd bit was the fact that I was not angry at his comments. For some reason, I found truth in his sentiments. I excused myself from lunch, my parents as well as his, visibly concerned, asked me where I was headed. "For a walk," I answered.

I headed down the streets of Thimphu, the capital of Bhutan. I looked around to find pieces of evidence to prove Jakub wrong, but I could not find any. No tall buildings, no highways, no sports cars, nothing metropolitan.

While I continued to search for material evidence, I noticed students clad in ghos and kiras (traditional Bhutanese dress), walking anxiously to school hoping they reach in time for their assembly where they cluster in a crowd, pray, and sing our national anthem; a practice serving to remind students of the unique heritage of Bhutan. There it was! Reason number one.

I continued on my walk more enthusiastically than before. After a while, my legs began to grow tired and I sat down on a bench by Tashichoedzong, the city's religious fortress. Horns exploded from the dzong signaling the end of the monks' prayer time and the road before me was engulfed in a sea of red robes as monks rushed to play by the river. One of the younger ones stopped next to me and asked me if I wanted to play Khuru (darts) with them. I politely refused, as it was getting dark but I truly appreciated the offer. I could feel the contentment growing inside of me.

On my way back home, I came across several posters advocating Gross National Happiness, a concept crafted by the Fourth Dragon King Jigme Singye Wangchuck, which read, "GNH is a holistic account of the nation's development marked by measures of the general happiness of the people." And then it hit me; Bhutan was a developed nation. I had found the final reason.

Jakub's sentiments seemed like a distant past now.

Recollecting the many sights of the day, the students upholding Bhutanese traditions, the kindhearted young monk who offered to play with me, and these two events showing me that Bhutan, infact, was developed in accordance to GNH, I realized that I loved my country for what it was regardless of how technologically backwards it was.

I went back home with a bigger heart and a wider smile than before. Upon entering my house, I greeted Jakub who was still sulking, bid his parents and mine goodnight, and laid in bed thinking to myself, "so this is home, this is Bhutan," the land of the thunder dragon.
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