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It is a hotly debatable issue to be discussed today. Poverty problem may invite various detrimental effects to nation such as robbery, murder as well as strict on road that is why to save nation from those effect government should have to take decision to unemployed and homeless wisely otherwise there is no substitute way to escape from those effect. I have lots of reasons to explain my way of writing.

first, people should be busy on their's work to make nation peaceful. If people have no work as well as home to live they have to think about their's future and children. In this critical situation if government can not solve the problem by providing such things which they need there would be arise critical situation. People may involved in robbery to fulfill hand to mouth problem. Their's majority may came to road for strict. That is why before came this situation government should have to take such a division to reduce or remove this problem to make peaceful country.

second, if government can provide work those unemployed people on industrial field country can get good improvement on various point of views. First of all country would be a peaceful similarly it can improve far better on industrial world because of having lots of hands to work. similarly, betterment would be arise in people lives. They can spend their's lives without mental disturbance because of having fixed work.

All in all, to make peaceful world it is duty of government to provide work and home to citizens. similarly, to develop nation in this modernized era in every field people in country to have work to do.