Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY:In the future, students have the choice of studying at home by using tech [5]

In the future, students have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which one would you prefer?

From my point of view, student should study at traditional schools due to some major reasons. The first and foremost one is that there is a teacher force at school. Teachers are professional persons that they can force students to do homework. They know what treat students. For example, teachers cannot control students at home by using computer correctly since they have few times to teach some lessons. Hence, they cannot teach all details by using computer or student`s parents must a teacher to study at home by using computer. So, it is very expensive for parents. What is more, students learn how life styles have in their life. They learn become on time on all works such as going to school and becoming clean every day. They become a society person. Last but not least, students can find many friends at traditional school since they have many classmates. Students have break between lessons in a day. Hence, they play their peers in break time. One of their lessons is sport at school yard. They must do some sports in this class. Hence, students must collect a place and do a match together.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay:Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your [5]

As far as I am concerned, when we compare my generation with my parents' generation, there are many different between them. The first and foremost one is that there is being an advance technology in my generation such as computer, car, airplane, ship and internet. For example, my parents traveled by bus since there were not many car in the city. When they wanted check their bank account, they must go to bank that understand their detail account. However now, there are electronic banks. So, we can do all our banking works. What is more, people change life styles such as living in apartments, going to travel regularly and having political roles for women in society. It is important that women did not have franchises in the last centuries. However now, they can have franchises since have effect from their life in the society. Women are working in political positions in the country now. Last but not least, there were not have lots of university in county and were studied very expensive since many people could not study in university. Only rich people could send their children to university. Hence, there were not many knowledgeable persons in the society.