Writing Feedback / 'many motives' - Why go to University? [7]

There are many benefits to attending University . Studying at University stateallows people to have many opportunities to improve their education and further their knowledge. Students can get diplomas and degreesfrom studying at University that means people can, allowing them to find well-paid jobs after graduating university . University can provide wide and high education for those who crave knowledge and who want to improve their intellectual ability. Students may also have a big experience for period of study (not sure what you are trying to say here?) . Although there may appear to be many unavoidable drawbacks that people can not avoid yourself from it , such asperhapsliving far from home, it should not become a significant barrier to those who really want to pursue their education . SoTherefore , I thinkbelieve that if people want to study at U niversity, they will find that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

I hope this helps :)

Writing Feedback / 'our friendship is not selfish' - my paragraph on my best friends [4]

It is hard to define a "good friend ".
-It is always better to write out the full words rather than using apostrophes, you may want to do that for all the words with apostrophes that you can write out as full words.

That friend is Jenny.

-Nice essay, though you may want to take out "very" (...want the very best for each other...), and "pretty" (...pretty simple....)