SweetCandy
Aug 26, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'the hardest question for a teenage boy or girl' - article on "I want to become a..." [4]
Write an article in about 200 words on the topic "I want to become a..."
What I want to become, it's the hardest question for a teenage boy or girl, it's to choose a single career out of million, it's just like selecting a tiny droplet out of a big ocean. From begining as a child till the maturity a person thinks of many different things that he or she might want to become, but suddenly in teenagehood lands the splitted ways infront where you have to make a single choice and leave the other behind. As for me, the same condition arose, but with the help of my parents I was able to determine what I wanted to choose, I chose biology subjects, as I reached to the conclusion that I want to become a doctor. It was my dream from the begining to become someone who would be able to serve the nation, help the poor and needy somehow, and I chose to be a doctor to fulfil my dream. I don't wish to become the wealthiest or the most highly graduated doctor of the world, but I do want to become the one who will serve her people and country in a true manner. I want to become a loyal doctor not only to the patients but also to the needy one's. Basically the summit that I want to reach is to become a good person first and then a doctor.
I am new here, I do request you all to check my article and tell me my mistakes and also inform me if I should add something or even delete something. Thanks.
Write an article in about 200 words on the topic "I want to become a..."
What I want to become, it's the hardest question for a teenage boy or girl, it's to choose a single career out of million, it's just like selecting a tiny droplet out of a big ocean. From begining as a child till the maturity a person thinks of many different things that he or she might want to become, but suddenly in teenagehood lands the splitted ways infront where you have to make a single choice and leave the other behind. As for me, the same condition arose, but with the help of my parents I was able to determine what I wanted to choose, I chose biology subjects, as I reached to the conclusion that I want to become a doctor. It was my dream from the begining to become someone who would be able to serve the nation, help the poor and needy somehow, and I chose to be a doctor to fulfil my dream. I don't wish to become the wealthiest or the most highly graduated doctor of the world, but I do want to become the one who will serve her people and country in a true manner. I want to become a loyal doctor not only to the patients but also to the needy one's. Basically the summit that I want to reach is to become a good person first and then a doctor.
I am new here, I do request you all to check my article and tell me my mistakes and also inform me if I should add something or even delete something. Thanks.