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fefe176

Sep 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Summer of Medical and Dental Educational Program at Yale University Medical School [3]

Thank you for your feedback! These are my top five schools (out of 12) Amherst, Johns Hopkins, Wesleyan, The college of Newjersy, Boston University.

fefe176

Sep 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Summer of Medical and Dental Educational Program at Yale University Medical School [3]

The short answer essay prompt on the Common Application states, "Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum)." Please be honest i take Criticism really well thanks I hope you enjoy!

Day by day: medicine, health disparities, public health. Six weeks of medicine, health disparities, and public health gave me a new holistic approach of how I see the world. There is actually real simple technique to master these topics: study, study, and study. At first medicine for me, was a life dream goal. As my mind adjusts to the challenges of medicine and the dreadful MCAT coming my way, my mind drifts freely, to sift through whatever needs sorting or disposing -- the upcoming day's tasks, stigmas, some nagging stress. As I close my eyes and my feelings go into deep rhythm, I am able to release that stress, forget that stigma, and set my mind in order. At the midway point, of Yale SMDEP, I stop and stare at mirror, congratulating myself for not giving up on my dreams. For just a moment, I stop to retrospect -- what once was a dream is now actually a life changing commitment I promise to keep. The Summer of Medical and Dental Educational Program at Yale University Medical School was the key I needed to reinsure myself I was on the right track. Then I continue on studying again.

fefe176

Sep 3, 2012

Undergraduate / How did you hear about "competitive school"? [7]

I'm sorry I don't mean to sound rude, but I really find it offense you're keeping the institute name a secret. We have students applying to Yale, Harvard and are very open with it .Naming the title "competitive school" then telling people not to blab out the name of the school is not necessary. There is no need to be so discrete. We are not worried about what school you're applying to, we want to help you with your essays and every detail helps the reader...

Now back to the topic.

A current <school> student, and good friend, was always boasting about <5 character school>. Mention what about the boasting caught your attention.

After one visit and info session at <School>, I understood why. This is not clear, what did the info session made you understand?

The concept of shaping my own college experience around diverse individuals who share a dedication to learning was an amazing combination quickly drew me to <school>. Few grammar errors, but good ending.

Overall, try to be more articulate in describing how your friend boasting and the school session drew you into <school>. ]Since you're limited to 300 characters just get straight to the point I'll be glad to look over the new version.

fefe176

Sep 2, 2012

Undergraduate / 'keep on learning' - Common App Transfer Essay Prompt [5]

I like your ending its very admirable, however, I believe you say a lot without really saying much, you talk about who you want to be but how is an LAC suppose to help you? I understand why you want to transfer but in minor detaila. What I got out of your essay is that you did not like your current state university and now you want transfer to a LAC. Im still baffled why you are in a CC now? You need to explain all of this ask yourself why and write. Maybe should make a comparison of a Liberal Art College vs. your state university so you can show what's appealing you to transfer into a LAC. Than talk about how the liberal art school can transform you into what you always wanted to be... which I would like to know by the way.