Writing Feedback / Toefl -Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, [4]

Prompt: Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.

Response -
"Money hai to Honey hai", as a popular maxim says, seems to be true because with money one can fulfill all his temporal desires like having world tour, visiting the best hotel in the world or having the delight of most expensive cuisine available. Still we see that not everybody is after money. Let's discuss more about it in details.

If I am affluent, I can use my wealth to fulfill my family's desires. Money would help me to secure the future of my family. My kids would be able to go the best school. Obviously I would provide all the luxuries possible in the world to my family to make them happy.

Conversely, making copious amount of money does come with some sacrifices; it accounts for lot of hard work and time. For instance, if I provide all the facilities to my family but don't spend much time with them because of the work load, my family would actually be joyless as I am not with them. What would be the use of abundant money if I still can not make my family happy?

Moreover, people after money tend to get more work pressure which cause precarious amount of stress in them, which in turn is injurious to health.

They get so engrossed in earning money that they even ignore their health. For example, work pressures do not give them ample amount of time to eat or they don't eat at the right time. All this leads to unhealthy habits of eating which is detrimental for one's health.

For a person like me who is very health cautious, would never approach for money at the cost of my health .For me, health is wealth.

Thus, albeit money can buy any worldly pleasure, I would still prefer to have a comfortable living.
So we can conclude that importance of money depends upon the priority of the person. For some people only money can buy them happiness but for some spending their precious time with family bring them more elation

Writing Feedback / Plase Evaluate my essay for Toefl - Category - Aggree or Disagree [4]

Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Response-

"Honesty is the best policy" and I certainly believe in it. I concur with the author's statement that telling the truth is crucial in any relationship, but whether we should do it always, we need to reflect on that.

Most of the people have tendency to remain in the good books of their loved ones, so if their friends or family have some weakness or some issue area, they would not share it with them for the fear of hurting them. But actually they are doing more harm than good. For instance, if you feel your friend is obese, but you still tell him/her that she is slim, you are actually putting risk on his/her health, as obesity is detrimental for good health. It may also lead to various other diseases. So instead of hiding the truth, one should actually advise his friend for something like to cut down sugar intake or go for some exercise. Your friend might feel hurt when you reveal the truth to him, but here, the priority is his health. Once he realize that you told him the truth for his better he would revere you for letting him know the truth and love you even more.

Moreover, for a relationship the most important factor is trust. Trust can only be build if both the persons/parties are truthful to each other. By hiding the truth you may actually jeopardize your relationship. For example, if you hide something from your friend for the fear of losing respect in his eyes & he is informed about the truth from someone else, and it might spoil your relationship or even end it.

However, there are certain cases, in which always speaking truth is not advisable e.g. for somebody who is bereaved, telling him the hard reality at that time may put him in to some shock or comma. Or somebody who has lost his confidence because of the poor grades, telling him the truth that he did not put much effort might further reduce his confidence or even provoke him to take an extreme action. So these kinds of truths should be tackled carefully.

Nonetheless it is crucial to speak the truth for any relationship but it is also important that we analyze the circumstances. There are numerous reasons people like to hide the truth e.g. to be in good books, for the fear of losing respect etc. but these excuses are injurious to build a good relationship. We all know that truth is bitter, but if we use its bitterness to ameliorate somebody, we are actually showing that how much we care for that relation.