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Sep 11, 2012
Writing Feedback / [IELTS]Men and women employed in full-time jobs have to share evenly household chores [3]
In your second as well as third para you didn't mention the present situation/modern world in which Men and women are consider of same status. In present scenario they shoulder household responsibilities.In your third para you talked of orthodox family (wife is home maker ). My view is to also mention the era(transition of men & women from (working/home maker) to men & women( both working).
In your second as well as third para you didn't mention the present situation/modern world in which Men and women are consider of same status. In present scenario they shoulder household responsibilities.In your third para you talked of orthodox family (wife is home maker ). My view is to also mention the era(transition of men & women from (working/home maker) to men & women( both working).