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penguin8   
Jan 15, 2009
Graduate / Improving my SOP ("Vasudev Kutumbkam") [6]

for an SOP, this is mighty long! you really need to shorten it drastically.

You're already sending in a resume right. So why not use the SOP as a platform to explain how CERTAIN activities have made you who you are or rather, have enhanced your personality/ character.

Good Luck! :)
penguin8   
Jan 15, 2009
Undergraduate / SAIC PERSONAL STATEMENT (The Shrink in Me) [NEW]

The shrink in me does not judge everything solely on face value. In fact, the thinker in me loves to dig deeper because surfaces can be boring. The "theorist" in me concocts peculiar ideas. The free spirit in me cares not for mental barriers. The artist in me exploits these roles to her advantage.

The artist in me is the bravest person amongst all these roles. It is she who expresses the depth, ideas and freedom that they wish to convey. It is she who expresses the depth, ideas and freedom that I, Ishika, wish to convey.

When starting a project, I believe that the concept is the most important aspect. I usually sit in a corner for a huge stretch of time and remain silent with a notepad until an original, rather profoundly wacky, idea strikes me. Even so, I deal with topics, which I feel people face at some point in their lives. In such work, I try to capture extreme emotion- from a heightened sense of bliss to edgy conflict. I heavily rely on color schemes to depict the mood of my paintings. I constantly experiment with tones to break the monotony that comes with repeating a palette. Sometimes an idea just comes to me when I'm scribbling. I find the most stimulating medium for me is ink. While I love using oils, the charm of black and white appeals to me greatly. The Spartan medium challenges me to convey more with less. While I am most comfortable drawing human figures, I make a conscious effort to draw other motifs. I do not believe in playing it safe.

The thing that separates artists from the rest is skill. The shrink or the thinker in me cannot draw an apple. However, the artist can. At SAIC, I hope to develop a steadier hand by sharpening my artistic and observational skills.

By sharpening my observational, artistic, and thinking skills in studio-art classes, I will be able to write more freely and objectively. Since art does not dismiss even the most bizarre thought, I hope to incorporate 'bizarre' ideas in my papers. Productive eccentricity will bring out the more daring writer in me.

Furthermore, SAIC's academic curriculum offers art history and critical appreciation. With learning about several art movements and artists in class, I will imbibe several qualities from such lessons and apply them in my approaches to both art and writing. The beautiful blend of subjects will help me grow as a person.

More importantly, a studio art environment is free and stimulating. A student can learn a lot from a still life study. Instead of assuming a normal angle, he may learn from his professor and classmates, that "a single object can be tackled from various perspectives". The class explores into unchartered ground. For example, a nude body is not 'scandalous'. Students observe every muscle flexed to the most miniscule detail. They try to get the nose or the facial expression right. The thinker and the free spirit shall truly rejoice at the prospect of such an education.

With tremendous room for original thinking, a studio arts environment is incredibly demanding. Any idea can be deemed clichéd. The theorist relishes the challenge of thinking out of the box!

The artist will emulsify everything around her. She will make the most of everyday.

While different parts of her desire different things at SAIC, this humble student hopes for evolution.

I approach SAIC to nurture these roles. At the same time, I hope to discover new ones.

IT HAS TO BE PERFECT. I NEED TO SUBMIT THIS SOON. ALL SUGGESTIONS ARE GLADLY WELCOME. THANKS!
penguin8   
Jan 15, 2009
Undergraduate / Final U of M Essays Short Essays. Punctuation and Quality Comments needed [10]

the primary language of the Philippines, Tagalog, is spoken frequently

instead, people frequently speak Tagalog, the primary language of the Philippines

thus lessening the tension.

just recently moved. or probably, : has/ had just recently moved. your call.

"A small but vital role to increase cultural appreciation, not only at the University of Michigan, but wherever life takes me." This sentence sounds incomplete.

Good job! I love how you've made the short essays interesting. Usually the brevity of such assignments leaves little room for weaving a nice composition :).
penguin8   
Jan 15, 2009
Undergraduate / Macalester supplement - 'minor problem with our cultural difference' [11]

Being a teacher, the last thing you want is to stand alone before a large class where students range from 6-14 years old. Regarding their ages, each requires particular attention. I teach in thatthis kind of special class at Youth House, a place for children living in the fishing village near Red River.

The first time I gothere AVOID SLANG, it was as if I stepped into a sub-cultural group so different from mine, like I was from a different generation.

Rather: It was as if I was from another generation
It was normal that children are naughty, but they behaved so different from my standardyou may rephrase this sentence. During my first experience as a teacher, I was harassed with weirdstrange questions, to which I honestly answered "I don't know". After showing my ignorance to those children's world,I seemed to be rejected by them. They did not obey my instructions, did not answer the prompt I gave them even though they could. Many times the frustration raised and made me want to give up. Was the few-year age gap between them and me that large?

However, as headstrong as those children were and was also more triumph-seeking , I didn't give up. After all, we were all Vietnamese,.Such small difference in age could not diverge us. I asked other more experienced volunteers about the children's background, and I even visited their place near Red River. They didn't have even one-half the accommodation I had, and their parents were often too busy maintaining their life that they could not look after fully their children. That's whyThis is why my students were quite disobedient, and sometimes were even aggressive. Knowing the reason for our differences, I approached them in a different way, using presents for commendation rather than punishments for their waywardness. Though I have tried hard, the disparity line cannot be fully eradicated, and .Their defiance still makes class period like a small fight.

You could avoid slang and grammatical errors. It would also help to be more concise. Otherwise, it sounds ok!
penguin8   
Jan 6, 2009
Undergraduate / COMMON APP ESSAY: FREE TOPIC. "Ingredients" [3]

You are five feet nine. You have ragged hair. You have a parrot nose. You have a ruddy face and tired eyes along with repugnant stubble. Your garb consists of tattered apparel. You are a masterpiece.

You are a painting; and all paintings, in their own right, are masterpieces. As a painting, your tired eyes speak, for once. The rich, who scorn you in person, admire you in your penury as a piece of art. They admire the difference. Pity or respect, you evoke feeling. As a painting, you are beautiful in your entirety. You are a painting, accepted the way you are.

This is the essence of art- capturing beauty in its authenticity. It's expressing raw emotion through evolved thought. You are a painting- an emotional being who expresses his joy with an exuberant smile, a jealous being with intricate views articulated with a simple cynical look, an angry individual who gives it all away by a change in hue. Captured. Expressed. Displayed. Admired. You are a painting. I am a painting, and all paintings are beautiful.

The beauty of a painting lies in its truth- whether it is as stark and blunt as a still life or a photograph, or as impressionist and obscure as a Monet or a Picasso. But it is art and it is the truth. With art, we don't hesitate. Sometimes the best part about art is that the piece is left open to interpretation. We can look at a painting and share our mood. There are always two meanings to a painting- the artist's interpretation and the personal understanding, and for most liberal minds, this is the greatest freedom. There is always a different and new perspective with a new observer. No perception is false or ridiculous.

The most experienced of artistes will tell you the secret to their success in one word- inspiration- the igniter of art, the splendid concoction of the human brain. The ability to find sparks in used fireworks. The reasons behind it are not important. It is the epiphany that is. They say that every artist struggles and lives in anguish for his entire life, thirsty for that one moment of inspiration. We look to books, to eras, to muses, within ourselves, EVERYWHERE (it seems like a quest, doesn't it?) for the igniter of "potential glory" or what normal people call, art. We all look for the "Ah ha" moment.

The essence, the beauty and the secret of art mean nothing without one vital element without which art, in fact life, is meaningless- zeal. The notion of a passionless existence sometimes scares me. If you love something, love with a passion. If you hate something, hate with a passion. If you work for something, work with a passion. It isn't about "being able", but "wanting". If you want to be an artist, you need to have the drive to be the best artist you can be. If you want to be a politician, you must have the energy; you must have the presence. If you want to join the circus, you need to have the will and the determination to grow the longest beard and be the best-bearded lady out there! This is what art is about. No pretty pictures. No pretences. No mild messages or flattery.

When I look at life-people, places or things- as a painting, I even find beauty in tragedy. It is because of art that I appreciate truth, creativity, inspiration and zeal. Understanding these ingredients of a painting gives me a little more clarity. It gives me a broader perspective. It makes me see the bigger picture (pun unintended).

Please let me know what you think of this common app essay. Will it go well with an admissions committee? I'm quite uncertain. Thanks a bunch! Cheers =)!
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