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Sep 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / The process of chocolate production; IELTS (Report) [2]

The diagram presents the process of chocolate production which is the all time favorite of all ages. Moreover, the other illustration also shows the way its price being separated and distributed to those participated in the process of production.

As can be seen in the diagram, making of chocolate is not just a matter of mixing and cooking using a stove. There is a need for special equipment particularly if a large production like in a factory is needed. On the other hand, dividing its price shows that a large amount of money is being allotted to the cost of ingredients and overheads as well as to the supermarket. Meanwhile, the small percentage of sales are only being given to the farmers who contributed for the main ingredient.

The cocoa, the main ingredient undergoes several processes before it became the delicious chocolate. It will be ground and will have two products which are cocoa liquor and waste. The cocoa liquor will then be transferred to a special equipment for pressing which will eventually become either a cocoa butter or powder. Sequentially, the cocoa powder and butter will proceed to the food industry for another certain production. On the other hand, the cocoa butter that underwent pressing will be mixed with sugar and other ingredients that will become an industrial chocolate.

On the other hand, the price of the chocolate is being divided into five parts, 2/3 of it will be given to the supermarket (34% of the money) and for the cost of ingredients and overheads (37% of the price). While, the remaining will be distributed according to different percentages; 15%, 10%, and 4% for the tax, the chocolate company, and the farmers, respectively.
the optimists   
Sep 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / College narrative essay on a moment of success. [2]

It was now my turn, the moment I had been waiting for all my life, heads held up high and with mouth grinning from ear to ear, I stepped into the room.

...very nice essay...true to life story...inspiring

with good grammar and vocabularies
the optimists   
Sep 28, 2012
Undergraduate / Elaborate on a time when something you witnessed caused you to reflect on your hritag [2]

...who almost made me lose my faith in my national identity.
....For some reason, I found the truth in his sentiments.
I looked around to find any pieces of evidence to prove that Jakub is wrong, but I could not find any of it. There's no tall buildings, no highways, no sports cars but just nothing in metropolitan.
the optimists   
Sep 28, 2012
Undergraduate / Favorable and unfavorable sides of being an employee or a business person [2]

The idea of favorable and unfavorable sides of being an employee or a business person contributes to a lot of things to discuss. Bearing this in one's mind, turned an individual particularly a newly graduate to pay attention about making the decision of which path in the career world to enter. Likewise, going through this contemplation would prevent someone from being trapped in a situation that could only waste money and effort.

The employee is an individual who works for someone whom usually called a boss in a company. One could be either a regular or part-time employee as long as he is working under the management of a person with higher position and the one who started and profited the business. An entrepreneur, on the other hand, is a person who could be the boss himself and alternately known as a businessperson. In connection with these professions, people who are looking for career must choose to be one of these. There are many advantages of being an employee. First, there will be a financial stability as the salary goes into one's account regularly every 15th or 30th day of the month even though a person did not work for one month probably because of the ailment or the time was spent for vacation. Paid non-working days are one of the benefits in a company. Second, aside from the paid sick-leave and vacation, there will be health benefits and insurance. Third, bonuses such as during holidays and in time of success the company might get in a year. Last reason but not limited to this is constant, fixed schedules and work ranges making it profitable to persons who want a structured daily activities. However, being an entrepreneur also bear good points such as flexibility of schedules and independence. Wherein, one could be the boss, the manager, and the decision-maker. There's no one who could fire him. Moreover, risk-takers individuals can enjoy the challenge of plan-making, development and realization of one's business. There will also be high salary potential unlike the fixed earnings of an employee.

However, working as an employee possessed drawbacks as well. One could be forced to work on a constant schedule as the company required an exact number of working hours. An individual will also experience boredom, pressure and stress at work because of having co-workers with the same or higher potentials and capacities. One may also feel of being uncompensated enough for the work he has done. Comparatively, being an entrepreneur is not all good most of the time.. One may experience a high level of stress and days of having headache since he is the one who solely makes the decision, planning, budgeting as well as marketing strategies to make one's business successful and profitable. A person might also spend longer than the required duration of work just to meet the deadlines. Not only that, starting a business may consume a large amount of money that will make a person temporarily unstable in terms of financial matters. Furthermore, maintaining self-motivation and optimism despite of uncounted pitfalls and drawbacks as well as incidences of quick decision making all required lots of effort from an entrepreneur.

In conclusion, it still depends on the personality, capacity and experiences of an individual on how he can achieve the success in the field he chose as his career. Although, a risk-taker person may enjoy being an entrepreneur, there should be a "check and balance" all the time to measure if the money and effort are being compensated in a preferably higher or equal value. Likewise, an employee should not only enjoy the benefit of having a constant work schedule and the amount of salary but also aimed to discover and take the risk to put out and show the most of what he can do.
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