Undergraduate / "MY FATHER" The person Who influenced my Life [2]

I think instead of starting with some generic remarks, you can try starting with an anecdote between you and your dad, as it may sounds more appealing.

Also, I like the latter paragraphs as they show who you are as a person, and how your dad has influenced you. However, you need to include more details and show to admission officers how you overcame challenges and how did you feel, instead of simply stating that you have overcame many challenges.

Undergraduate / 'Life is full of mistakes that need to be made in order to grow' My Common App Essay [2]

To me, this story sounds interesting, but you could improve by adding more details into it. For example, how did you 'get ready for it' other than watching Man vs. Wild?

"Although embarrassing, I do not regret my jump. I try not to regret anything I do in life. I have learned to live without fear or regret. Life is full of mistakes that need to be made in order to grow. Five years and many injuries later, I still hold this lesson to be true."

This part is a bit vague, as you should include how you learned from your experience, and how you made this lesson to be true. Details will greatly help.