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Sep 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Task 2 Some people think that no one should be allowed to work after the age [6]

Hey pijiuwdw,

So far it's a pretty strong essay,

Some people start to believe that

I think this phrase could be improved, to say "some people believe" or "some people are starting to believe"

Also I think it's "in a nutshell" and the last sentence "grow up better" could be simplified to just "grow."

Overall, looks good.
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