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Oct 4, 2012
Book Reports / Thesis Statement feedback on Helen of The Iliad [2]

Hi guys! I am writing my midterm paper for english on the Iliad and is about why Helen is important to the plot of the story & also what her role was in the Trojan war. I need some feedback on my thesis statement on how I could make it better...

"Helen just about has the entire package from the Iliad including she is the most inspired character in all of literature, has beauty, attitude, and in most of the Trojans eyes, simply means nothing but trouble."

I'm not liking the beginning but i'm not sure how to reword it all? Help would be appreciated :)
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