heymishel
Oct 15, 2012
Undergraduate / UF Essay-Contributing to the campus-unemployment issues [3]
Here, I've redone it a bit (the green parts). Thank you for you help! Is this any better?
"I can do this", I thought to myself. Nervously, I ran a pep talk in my head as I approached the oncoming traffic of students. "Just go out there and don't stop till you help at least one person. One person is a world of difference because unemployment is a big issue. " I took a deep breath and stepped forward.
"SGA sponsored career development showcase! We've got all kinds of opportunities lined up here!" I shouted out to the crowd walking by, passing out flyers as I chanted. "Hey, hey you! What's your name?" The girl I was speaking to stopped suddenly and turned around, slightly annoyed by the approaching stranger.
"I'm Cici" the girl replied. I filled with adrenaline knowing that I wasn't completely ignored. I gripped tightly to my flyers, took a chance, and stepped forward . "Well Cici, I am Michelle. I am the SGA President here on this campus and I have helped to organize this showcase!"
"What is all this for?" Cici inquired.
"Well, each table is an opportunity, set up in steps. You can get your resume fixed right on the spot, sign up for career and academic advising, and sit down for job interviews at the end!"
Cici's attention was caught. The look of surprise on her face was undeniable, "You're saying they're going to hire someone here? I have been looking for a job for months."
"I know, finding work is a serious obstacle people are facing and I would really like to help. Instead of sending you off on your own, I will walk down our row of tables." Cici looked hesitant but I was not about to give up, "I promise you can do this. There's nothing to worry about, this was put together for you to succeed."
Cici did as I said and we went through the steps of job etiquette. Finally it came time for her to meet with a manager. Twenty minutes later, she shot up from her interview, beaming as she approached me. She thanked me and explained had it not been for the showcase and my guidance, she would not have received a job and would have had been struggling with her finances at the end of the month. It was gratifying to know that simply by illuminating the steps she needed to take, she could succeed.
Having witnessed the success of my career showcase giving multiple people employment, I was rendered the confidence I needed to turn my tangible ideas into actualities. While it may be a small feat in comparison to eliminating nation-wide unemployment rates, it is also a start. I have so many ranged ideas that have already benefited the student body at my small community college. I can only imagine the success my ideas can yield on a larger scale-like that of a UF campus.
I am eager to be part of the Gator Nation and bring my motivation, desire, and ideas to the Swamp that can truly make a difference.
Here, I've redone it a bit (the green parts). Thank you for you help! Is this any better?
"I can do this", I thought to myself. Nervously, I ran a pep talk in my head as I approached the oncoming traffic of students. "Just go out there and don't stop till you help at least one person. One person is a world of difference because unemployment is a big issue. " I took a deep breath and stepped forward.
"SGA sponsored career development showcase! We've got all kinds of opportunities lined up here!" I shouted out to the crowd walking by, passing out flyers as I chanted. "Hey, hey you! What's your name?" The girl I was speaking to stopped suddenly and turned around, slightly annoyed by the approaching stranger.
"I'm Cici" the girl replied. I filled with adrenaline knowing that I wasn't completely ignored. I gripped tightly to my flyers, took a chance, and stepped forward . "Well Cici, I am Michelle. I am the SGA President here on this campus and I have helped to organize this showcase!"
"What is all this for?" Cici inquired.
"Well, each table is an opportunity, set up in steps. You can get your resume fixed right on the spot, sign up for career and academic advising, and sit down for job interviews at the end!"
Cici's attention was caught. The look of surprise on her face was undeniable, "You're saying they're going to hire someone here? I have been looking for a job for months."
"I know, finding work is a serious obstacle people are facing and I would really like to help. Instead of sending you off on your own, I will walk down our row of tables." Cici looked hesitant but I was not about to give up, "I promise you can do this. There's nothing to worry about, this was put together for you to succeed."
Cici did as I said and we went through the steps of job etiquette. Finally it came time for her to meet with a manager. Twenty minutes later, she shot up from her interview, beaming as she approached me. She thanked me and explained had it not been for the showcase and my guidance, she would not have received a job and would have had been struggling with her finances at the end of the month. It was gratifying to know that simply by illuminating the steps she needed to take, she could succeed.
Having witnessed the success of my career showcase giving multiple people employment, I was rendered the confidence I needed to turn my tangible ideas into actualities. While it may be a small feat in comparison to eliminating nation-wide unemployment rates, it is also a start. I have so many ranged ideas that have already benefited the student body at my small community college. I can only imagine the success my ideas can yield on a larger scale-like that of a UF campus.
I am eager to be part of the Gator Nation and bring my motivation, desire, and ideas to the Swamp that can truly make a difference.