Graduate / My family considers Education is a must ; Statement of Purpose/Petroleum Engineering [4]

Hi s_k,

Sorry to be blunt but your SOP is rife with grammatical errors, is poorly structured, and superficial. I would delete the first part about your family as, although it largely affected/affects your life in general, it has little to do with your pursual of petroleum engineering as a degree and is, frankly, a little bit awkard. Actually, my impression from this essay is that you are pursuing grad school to simply elevate your pay grade and please your father--even though this is true--it is not something you would want an admissions committee to know about.

Well Testing Interpretation and Reservoir Simulation are the subjects which captivated my interest when I studied them by the most inspiring and pedantic teachers I ever had, who did their MS from Imperial College, always giving exposure of their master's degree and field work, motivating me to study them in greater depth. These subjects are full of interest and really need your critical thinking to come up with cogent solution to tackle the problem . With the emerging importance of exploitation of Unconventional reservoir, making it economically feasible to produce, I really want to pursue my research work in this field as there are only few experts in the globe who understands their complex behavior modeling, its management, well testing interpretation and simulation technique. ---> I would expand on this as this is your purpose.

Also, I would advise you to list previous research experience if you had any.

All in all, it would be best to re-write your SOP--google "how to write an effective SOP" and post your new draft here for comments.

Hope that helps