Book Reports / Powerful Afghani women in "A Thousand Splendid Suns" thesis help [5]

'Power of women in some cultures' - Thesis statement for Thousand Splendid Suns

I wonder if this statement is good? ( My English is not so good)

In some culture women are powerless, they can't live the life they want. Such as forced marriages, lack of educational opportunities.

Need help ASAP.. please