Undergraduate / Government P.H Pilot High School Dadu [2]

Ahmed Zafari , sorry coz i'm not commenting on your topic actually i need your help in reviewing my SoP that i have written recectly, I want you to make it correct grammatically and spelling , punctuation and so on... i would be very thankful to you if you reply me as soon as possible.

iam writing it here..
Personal Statement
I have always been inspired to develope my understanding of the world around me, through reading books, articles and news. It is my aspiration to pursue a career in engineering.

Apart from that I have always thought about helping the people of my community in a way that could prove to beneficial. Accordingly, I have been teaching Mathematics to the students of matriculation of Government P.H Pilot High School Dadu during my vacations and also provide career counselling to them from time to time.

The U.S. has fascinated me in so many ways. It has stood forefront in the science and research and has done groundbreaking advancements in technology, astorlogy, medicine, etc. The U.S. is the land where people of different cultures and beliefs live with harmony and work for the prosperity of the country.

I believe that in the program I will be interacting with professors and a student body that will be culturally diverse with additional benefits of greater interaction and individual attention of the faculty.

I am very keen to join Global Undergraduate Exchange Program in the U.S. as I strongly believe that this will help me further my goals and I can prove to be a valuable asset to the community within my country.

Scholarship / I opted my career as an electrical engineer. Personal Statement for Review [3]

Personal Statement

I am passionate about science and technology. Anything related to it drive my attention towards it.
Therefore, i want to acquire excellence in technical knowledge. This is why i opted my career as an
electrical engineer.
The govt. of my country is doing best to redress the energy related issues, like that of the load-shedding
which have been a hindrance to the prosperity of my country and has gravely affected various instrumental
sectors of the state either directly or indirectly such as damage to the economy , deterioration of the indus-
tries as a result unemployment has risen, disturbance to the institutional process and so on. For that the
govt. needs technical and highly skilled people. In my view, the solution of this problem lies with the people
with technical expertise, like us, the future engineers. It is us who have to solve the problems so that our
country could avoid further crises.
This program is an auspicious opportunity for me, through which i can procure technical education from
the world's best institutions which would not only help me with my career but would also enable me to give
my services to my country and its people in a better way.

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