vali001
Nov 3, 2012
Undergraduate / My mother is a woman of multifarious personalities; she has made an impact on me [2]
Can someone please help me with my college essay prompt A, revisions would be very helpful, thnx.
"College is almost here and it's going to be an awesome year with all the perks of being a senior!" This is what I thought to myself every day before starting the fall semester. I am excited for this new chapter in my life while some others are having a hard time to embrace the change. Back when I was younger, change was difficult for me to embrace as well, but it all improved thanks to my mother. Change is an inevitable part of our life, one that we all go through, whether it is the way we act, the people we associate with or our surroundings - and many fear it while others embrace it.
For the last eighteen years I have encountered many difficult changes, but the biggest is yet to come - the transition from high school to college. The hardest change for me isn't worrying about funding for the education that will prepare me for the rest of my life; it is the fact that my mother, will not be there to support me through the thick and thin. But, my mother has already taught me well how to embrace change all throughout my life so I don't have trouble in the future.
I remember the first time she helped me transit to a different lifestyle like it was yesterday - on the day of my fifth birthday, back in Kosovo. At first, it seemed like it was going to be just like any other birthdays I've had in my past; my mother baking me my favorite Esterhazy cake, and me sitting in the living room playing with my new toys my father had gifted me. It all changed when we heard gunshots all over the place and the Serbian army soldiers stormed into our house, forced us outside on the street and burnt the entire house down to rubble. We were then transported to a refugee camp, since our homeland was being invaded by the Serbians. Even in that refugee camp my mother refused to give up and with the limited resources baked me the same cake to console me from the disturbances and said, "Son, no matter what obstacles you face in life, never give up! Always help others in need because God will then help you succeed." At that time I had no idea what she meant, but eventually it started to make sense as I grew older and realized how my parents didn't give up and left everything behind to start anew in the United States, just so my life doesn't get wasted amidst the havoc.
My mother is a woman of multifarious personalities and this makes her a balanced person. She always tries to enjoy life and never gives up on anything. She is never pessimistic about anything, no matter how tough it gets. When there is something troubling her, she never reveals it front of anyone and tackles the problem with a calm mind. And, it is due to all her efforts that I am here in the United States, leading a successful life, being educated in a top-notch school district. She is the one who taught me how to stand up for myself and how to embrace change and tackle difficult times; return to the community by volunteering and changing the lives of the underprivileged. It is now after about thirteen years that I understood the meaning of her important saying, to never fear the unexpected, but to make it a part of my life.
Can someone please help me with my college essay prompt A, revisions would be very helpful, thnx.
"College is almost here and it's going to be an awesome year with all the perks of being a senior!" This is what I thought to myself every day before starting the fall semester. I am excited for this new chapter in my life while some others are having a hard time to embrace the change. Back when I was younger, change was difficult for me to embrace as well, but it all improved thanks to my mother. Change is an inevitable part of our life, one that we all go through, whether it is the way we act, the people we associate with or our surroundings - and many fear it while others embrace it.
For the last eighteen years I have encountered many difficult changes, but the biggest is yet to come - the transition from high school to college. The hardest change for me isn't worrying about funding for the education that will prepare me for the rest of my life; it is the fact that my mother, will not be there to support me through the thick and thin. But, my mother has already taught me well how to embrace change all throughout my life so I don't have trouble in the future.
I remember the first time she helped me transit to a different lifestyle like it was yesterday - on the day of my fifth birthday, back in Kosovo. At first, it seemed like it was going to be just like any other birthdays I've had in my past; my mother baking me my favorite Esterhazy cake, and me sitting in the living room playing with my new toys my father had gifted me. It all changed when we heard gunshots all over the place and the Serbian army soldiers stormed into our house, forced us outside on the street and burnt the entire house down to rubble. We were then transported to a refugee camp, since our homeland was being invaded by the Serbians. Even in that refugee camp my mother refused to give up and with the limited resources baked me the same cake to console me from the disturbances and said, "Son, no matter what obstacles you face in life, never give up! Always help others in need because God will then help you succeed." At that time I had no idea what she meant, but eventually it started to make sense as I grew older and realized how my parents didn't give up and left everything behind to start anew in the United States, just so my life doesn't get wasted amidst the havoc.
My mother is a woman of multifarious personalities and this makes her a balanced person. She always tries to enjoy life and never gives up on anything. She is never pessimistic about anything, no matter how tough it gets. When there is something troubling her, she never reveals it front of anyone and tackles the problem with a calm mind. And, it is due to all her efforts that I am here in the United States, leading a successful life, being educated in a top-notch school district. She is the one who taught me how to stand up for myself and how to embrace change and tackle difficult times; return to the community by volunteering and changing the lives of the underprivileged. It is now after about thirteen years that I understood the meaning of her important saying, to never fear the unexpected, but to make it a part of my life.