Undergraduate / 'The same, yet different' - Common App Essay topic of choice [3]

It had some really good thoughts and humor (the "Also my best friends like to move" part among other things) but I feel like you need to expand more. Why was meeting Taylor Swift so important to making you who you are today? And like linmark said, Why did you start talking on your new basketball team. The ideas are all there, just try to be more specific. :)